The Black Shack

The little black shack

Sitting in the cornfield

Among the barrenness on the side of the road

Hides itself from the world

But is visible to me

it sits there in the light

In broad, open daylight

As black as the midnight sky

The purpose of this shack is unclear

For nothing sits inside of it

For it's just an empty shack

Or an eyesore on the side of the road

It's quite odd as to why someone would build it there

On the side of the road

Within the confines of a cornfield

And not store a thing inside of it

It's just like problems in our life

Taking up space in the side of our mind

Hiding from the rest of the world

And appearing as an eyesore to us

So do as you may with your "black shack"

Take whatever steps are needed

For mine is no longer a black shack

But now a pile of black ashes

Scattered around, and out of my mind.

Reviews

[Sreenath]

very well written it feels awesome when i take black shack=fear inner)
extremely well written
enjoyed reading it..peace out ..keep smiling :)

[TL Boehm]

I know where Portage is. I now reside in Muskegon. This is a solid write, the black shack a metaphor for our own rubbish piles, our abandoned things. The eyesores in our lives. Well penned.

[idiotproof--1]

I like that you used a black shack to symbolize problems in peoples lives. At one point you say "in the side of our mind" I think you may have meant "inside of our minds" but I could be wrong. This was a really good poem with an unexpected strong message. keep up the good writing.

[nastassia]

I love how the black shack is not really about a black shack, but more of a metaphor for one's mind and thoughts. I really enjoyed this very much. Keep it up

[NotGoodEnough]

This was an interesting read, and I loved the way the poem flowed as I read it. The images that were created in my mind were beautiful

[Sebastian Falzarano]

Eerie poems like this are my favorite. And this has it all: mystery, suspense, horror...
The poem also flows smoothly also and the theme is clearly there. Great job and I mean it.

[Olivia]

I glad your black shack is in ashes. How long did that take.
Great write

[Holly Mason]

Black Shack...I like it
Black shack field empty
Good descriptive piece...
Containing many thoughts and meaning
Thank you for sharing

[Mayank]

beautiful message delivered with a perfect metaphors. good write.

[Moonlight]

This is indeed a very nice poem. The analogy of the black shack with the problems in one's life is a unique concept and I liked it a lot. Thank you for sharing. :)