Desire

We all can feel alone sometimes

Desire is like gasoline, it can be used for the better or worse

It can fuel your engine and take you far

Or burn down your hopes and dreams

Desire in a way drives us all mad, but that can be good

Drive you mad enough so you go where others are afraid

And possibly change the world for the better

It can also lead you to the negative extremes

Where we all steer clear of

But in this case, I desire a companion

And yeah I know, who doesn't?

But holding onto your thoughts is dangerous indeed

Writing them down, or talking them through is healthy

And my hand is tired

Someone to encourage me when I set a goal

And to pick me up when I fall down

Someone just to lay by my side when we are too tired to carry on

And just relax, how great does that seem?

Somebody beautiful, on the inside and out

One who looks out for others before themselves, just like me

A leader who can lead me out of a rut

Mostly just somebody to care when all is wrong

When hope is lost and desire is on low

Someone to boost it back up

I want a companion, but yeah who doesnt?

Author's Note

Let me know what I did well, and what needs improvement!

Reviews

[ANTO]

Im sure theres a pulchritudinous* companion out there waiting for you Ricky - you have a good heart -
one tip dont get all twisted by love that can't be - stay true to yourself and you'll get the one for you.

I would move the second part of line one onto the next line - the words 'Desire is like gasoline" deserve their own line imho.

Good musings R. :)

*nod to Mescaline Butterfly for that word xD

[dan]

Ricky, This can be copied/pasted on to a Match.com application. Companionship, whether platonic or loving/sexual is high on most folks' list of desireable accoutrements, a partner to share hopes and dreams, likes and dislikes. But to use your alone time wisely is what forms your 'self', making that self more appealing viscerally to others who may become the one. You're young, you will find your other. And sometimes when you're not even looking. take care...dan

[RiverRei]

Line 4, cut it after "drives us all mad" and make a new line.
Overall I liked it. Made me wanna be that girl for you almost ;P Great work, keep sending the read requests!!!

[RiverRei]

We all have this feeling at one point or another. It will pass/you'll find that companion you desire.

[wordman]

you need a good woman by your side

[stars are far]

That was very great work.. keep that up :)

[Melinda McQueen]

I like this. Filled with emotion. Good write.

[suchitra sarmah]

the message is good but I dont like formats of your poems,anyway everyone have their own styles,but i feel like i am reading prose and not poetry

[Kaitlin]

Do you watch Dr. Who? (Use of the word companion)

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[RiverRei]

They use this term in Firefly too :P