Red

In between school, work, and a hateful home life it really is a tough time to get a break.

Red red red the color of anger

Walk in my school I am surrounded by red

Grumpy teachers, impatient students, reports due left and right

Red red red....

I got a job maybe this can be an escape

Out of the red and into something more blue

But how dumb was I, too think it was that easy

Like something out of a fairy tale

Work is more red than school

“Do this, do that! Why are you late! Point, point point!”

Coworkers mad that I do my job, bosses mad that I don't do it well enough

Temperatures to where my skin is blue, but everything else... Red

Sick of this all, I go home hoping for a break

And I do, one week red and one week blue

The blue is great, and well needed 

But I go to the red, its all just red

EVen my bed is red there is no where to run

“You want to be a lawyer? You’re not good enough”

“You want to do theatre? Are you gay?”

Well i'll tell you what I have everything to prove and nothing to lose

Ill be a top of my throne, you can shine my shoes

If im not good enough, I cant wait to prove you wrong

Just don't expect anything from me once I'm up top

Looking down on you all

Author's Note

What did I do well, and what needs improvement?

Reviews

[Kaitlin]

Hey Ricky, loved this poem. I'm going to illistrate the last 3 verses so I can hang them up somewhere! I totally empathize with what you're saying in this poem. I go to a private school where our teachers expect so much of us that it gives me a headache. Sometimes all you want to do is slam a door in their faces!

The only suggestion I have is reread it for comma use. I'm no expert but I think a couple lines (like "...I got a job, maybe this...") need a pause. My english teacher read my poem before I posted it. He told me to read t outloud and put a comma or period anywhere I paused.

BTW i tried to give you a 92.738 but they wouldn't let me put decimals in.

[Ricky Campbell]

Thank you! I never really thought of that, I will get to that!

[Coyote Poetry]

You made your point.
"If im not good enough, I cant wait to prove you wrong
Just don't expect anything from me once I'm up top
Looking down on you all"
Sometime we must escape people and place to know what we need and can accomplish our dreams. Anger can be a god tool. Motivate us to find our proper place. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

The only thing I can suggest is just look over your grammar errors, is all. Otherwise, I feel your pain! I used to feel this way...I'd be busting my a*s in school, kissing boss's a*s at work, and not getting a break at home, where you'd think you'd find a safe refuge. It isn't always like this unfortunately. Don't listen to anyone though. Just pretend you do. And do what you want to do, what your whole body is telling you. What matters in life is to be happy.

[Jamestown]

Well written piece, but I pray that when you do make it, cause I truly
believe you will ,that you will be confident, but also humble! If you take
the attitude of the end of this write, you will become
a person that you hate right now! In other words you will become one
of them! Stay meek! Hope you will check pier gazing my new piece
out,thanks for sharing and b-blessed