Three Girls

A real life situation that I just needed to vent about at the time.

three girls

a wife, a friend, and a buddy

i feel as if they all love me

i dont know what to do

because one of these women is you

im not proud of what ive done

of what ive done with more than one

im not sure what to do now

i want more

more than this

more than just the one night bliss

but im not ready

i dont want to move on

her shadow isn't fully gone

i dont want forever but i want more than right now

i want to express myself but dont know how

there's one that i want

more than the rest

but im not sure if that would be best

i know that youre married

and i know were just friends

but when i leave your house

part of me ends

i know i cant win

i know i cant have you

but in the end

it hurts that ive lost you

Reviews

[Who Cares]

I like the that you kept it simple but your word were powerful. I also like how you were a little more creative with your rhyme scheme. The only thing I can say was a flaw is your lack of capitalization. I is always capitalized as well as the first letter to each line.

[Jess]

I like this a lot. It's very good

[Charles V. Hayden]

I apologize, your first name is Oscar. Sorry about that!

[Charles V. Hayden]

I like your poem Mike. I cam empathize with the position you are in but as a Christian man I want to encourage you to let go of this married woman. It is not God's will for you to break up a woman's marriage. I know it won't be easy and it probably will hurt but please pray about this and I wish you God's blessings. Nice poem!

[T.C. Banks]

This poem was written years ago, long before I came to know Christ. Thank you for your kind and informative words.

[Charles V. Hayden]

Ok, well that makes me feel better. I thought it was a recent poem and you are welcome!

[rnuff]

clever rhyme scheme, enjoyed this write.

[T.C. Banks]

I actually don't use much capitalization or punctuation in my work. I know they should be but that reminds me of the much despised school work poems that i used to have to write

[Suze]

I like this, very simply worded but powerful.