Fogged with clarity

*Work in progress*

New breezes bring fresh rains of years gone by

Whispering winds foreshadow old pains not yet arrived

**UPDATE 9.3.2014**
~~Omitted: "Clouded sky's cast light to the blinded eye

Silent streams call out to deafened ears"~~

~~Replaced with:
Silent streams speak memories yet to be lived

Official poem as of 9.3.14

New breezes bring fresh rains of years gone by

Whispering winds foreshadow old pains not yet arrived

Silent streams speak memories yet to be lived

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"fresh rains of years gone by

Whispering winds foreshadow old pains not yet arrived "

Good wording and imagery,. Bravo.....................

[T.C. Banks]

I thank you for your review and look forward to your input on other works of mine. I will be sure to return the favor.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).......

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

hmm this sounds interesting I liked the first three lines they seem to flow very nicely with each other but the last line seems a little out of place because of ear, I guess it could be just me though. I think the thought of the whole piece is good though ^^ I don't know if I understand it fully (or if I am really suppose to lol) but it does have nice imagery that I like.

Good Job