Believe

Just a poem about believing I guess...

Love to live

And live to love

Believe in heaven 

Being sent up above

Believe in yourself

Don't be a b*tch

It doesn't matter of you're poor

Or if you're rich

Believe in your friends

They'll be there for you

Friends are forever 

Through and through

Believe in the truth

But not the lies

Some people stay true

Others wise and sly

When you are sad

Believe in happiness

You're all you can be

You're the best of the best

Others who hate you

Won't say nice things

Do not believe

At all what they say

Enjoy your life

Believe in having fun

But be very careful

You only have one

Believe in your mind

It's a powerful thing

Without it you couldn't 

Decide or think

Believe in living

And live a good life

Always do what's best

Always do what's right

Reviews

[dan nacario]

simple yet a good piece of poetry..keep writing.. :)

[Sarah]

I like the first 19 lines and the last 4 lines. I think it has a lot of potentional if you work on the rest. nice work keep writing.

[Words of Thunder]

Hits you over the head with a point and simple rhyme scheme. The simplistic rhythm breaks down around line 18, and the break is jarring, but not in a good way.

While it isn't bad - there is potential - it's not the greatest. Keep it up.

Also, I like the Dr. Seuss feel I get from the way you flow when it doesn't break down.

[Miss Evans]

*Returning the Love*

I liked this one. It rhymed for the most part, although the rhythm was a little lost at some parts, and it's very clear. I like that each line is about the same length, because it gives it an even rhythm when reading it.

I think you could combine the lines that go together, to make longer lines. (Ie. Love to live, And live to love) because the mood of the poem is not sullen or downtrodden, but keeping the lines so short makes it seem as though it is.

Having the longer lines might bring the reader to read it more fluidly, and quicker. It would match the rhythm and beat to the mood and tone of the poem.

*Thumbs Up*