Oh, My Friend

Oh, My Friend

A Poem by Treble

Winds cease to blow,

The night grows ever darker,

As do you.

 

Clouds shed a tear,

The sky begins to fade,

Like sunset into night.


The roses wither,

My heart cries.

It cries for you.

 

Swiftly moving

Are the waves that you are,

Fading without a trace.

 

Silence grips the night of day,

As you wither away,

Forever lost.

© 2017 Treble


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Treble
I wrote this poem two days ago. What do you think?

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Losing someone, especially a dear friend or family member. .. Well that usually hits very hard, and painful. Very well penned. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Treble

8 Years Ago

Thanks! And no kidding, it really does hit hard... I've never been through it myself, since I haven'.. read more
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8 Years Ago

I did. Even the suicide attempt of my lover... Some kind of invincible darkness lingers around at th.. read more
Beautiful and melancholic, both a most captivating read Treble. Moves the reader in many ways, the emotion is palpable :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Treble

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much! :)
There is a melancholic and sad tune in the poem, it's like I'm losing someone so very close to me, it's like my frnd and I were there just a minute ago but he/she vanished away within blink of an eye... So powerful and hits hard in the heart... Very well done...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 8 Years Ago


Treble

8 Years Ago

Wow, thank you so much! Means a lot to me! That's exactly the idea I was trying to portray. :D
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This poem is stilling to me. Most would usually say it is 'moving' but when I read it I feel it creep into my mind and create a stillness there. I am drawn to your words though I don't know fully what they mean. I understand the loss, but not having any backstory to go with it is irksome yet freeing.

"Silence grips the night of day," where did you come up with this line? It's astounding. Excellently done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Treble

9 Years Ago

I honestly have no idea where that line came from. :) It just came. :D Thank you so much! I can't be.. read more
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I really like this piece. Lots of emotion. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Treble

9 Years Ago

Thank you!
Lots of emotion and depth in this piece.
i like the way it has been written out.
I enjoyed reading it.
keep writing :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Treble

9 Years Ago

Thank you!
cimmy wuv xxxooo

9 Years Ago

No worries :)
It's brilliant the way you managed to convey the emotions through your selection of words. The poem contains a very sorrowful theme but your diction and style of writing really made the poem captivating. I really liked the way you interpreted the natural aspects such as the sky, flowers and so on by comparing them with the sadness that one feels upon losing a very good friend or someone they care about. Very well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Treble

9 Years Ago

Thank you!
Elodie Thompson

9 Years Ago

It was my pleasure.
Very nice use of personification and deeply sad... be it about a friend moving or passing away, the memory fades... nice writing, Treble!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Treble

9 Years Ago

Aww, thank you! You have amazing writing too!
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9 Years Ago

you are welcome, and thanks...
Well, this is awesome. "Clouds shed a tear" rain. "The night of day" creative. Nicely done. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Treble

9 Years Ago

Wow! Thanks so much! I'm glad you loved it! Second one's my favorite as well. :)
Dani The Unreviewed

9 Years Ago

You are welcome :)
I always love when romance whether sad or not is blended with nature...nicely done...SyberRose

Posted 9 Years Ago


Treble

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much!

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