Yes Glow AND BE MORE SO...

I don't know...it's still rough

 Yes, glow and be more so...be this sweet and this sour.

           Be alive more than your casual death.

           Rise from the chambers of your stars

                    and never leave me where

                                 your ghost

                              has kissed me

                                  the least

Reviews

[DrD]

I found the concept interesting and the work well constructed. No need for apologies for a work well done.

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Thank you so much, Sir :)

[David Scott]

Nothing bad here at all... We make ghost of many relationships. Often we "ghost" ourselves.
I like the title. It hold up hope to my eye.
A lovely expression Lynn.
Thank you for sharing your creativity again.

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Thank you, scott, for being so kind :) I don't know, it needs work, maybe it's the format. maybe it's just what it is

[David Scott]

It is an expression from a beautiful and intelligent soul...

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Thank you...

[dan]

lynn, I think this is VERY good as is. I mean, if you want to change a word or two, OK. But I don't think you should make it any longer...you say so much in the abbreviated length you wrote it. The wordplay is superb, and I especially like this sequence: "Rise from the chambers of your stars and never leave me where your ghost has kissed me the least." That's just plain delicious! Great job. take care...dan

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Dan, so sewet of you to stop by and leave this great review. Thank you so much my friend :)

[Rye]

your ghost
has kissed me
the least

Love this part, this is wonderful, enjoyed this write

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Thank you for reading

[wordman]

a touching, and deep write my friend! i liked the last line

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Thank you my friend :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i'm not being kind...this is a really intriguing write....we have to glow in life, show our flame our spark...it may sometimes save us and sometimes kill us...but at least we know we are alive...and if we don't do that our ghost will kiss the least...there will not be memory that really counts.

we need to ignite with life, so that in death the afterglow is strong.

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Thank you so much, Jacob, for this and all of your kind support :)