Yes Glow AND BE MORE SO...

I don't know...it's still rough

 Yes, glow and be more so...be this sweet and this sour.

           Be alive more than your casual death.

           Rise from the chambers of your stars

                    and never leave me where

                                 your ghost

                              has kissed me

                                  the least

Reviews

[emmajoy]

'.. never leave me where .. your ~~ '

There's a sense of wanting more, of having opened the book but not yet read the words. Your two opening lines seem, for me, to look in two directions.. Whatever and however you write, you leave distinct echoes of 'i'm trying to explain, be patient, please.' You write with heart, lynn.. always have, always will.

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Thank you Emma for leaving your footprints on my page

[Lorry]

Nicely captured Lynn. Has a haunting, echo of an ache unfulfilled within the words.

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Thank you so much Nemo :)

[Ken Simm.]

No it is not rough. Don't change it it is perfect and it is beautiful.

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Thank you so much, Ken :)

[Adam Adams]

Alright, so it's 'nother one of my fav!
You stir a very slight taste of exotica with words & nicely blended 'em all with the saliva of your dark visions. Very interesting & deeply written. The mirror of your inner spirit is being refracting & deflecting well of the pilgrims of your BOMBSHELL heart. Excellent work!

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You are very kind, Vortex. Thank you

[Troy Henson]

Love the format!! Worked very well.

Read this a few times now and I smile. Quite the thought provoking little piece.

Well written.

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Thank you so much, Troy :)

[Sami Khalil]

Some great lines here to appreciate and appropriate. You are gifted....:)))

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Thank you Sami

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. ....:)))))))

[andrew mitchell]

Another poem that lingers after its read, I think the format does this as you trail off the grid leaving me with thoughts to chew on. I thought this was clever and profound and " never leave me where the ghost has kissed me the least" What a wonderful line! Thanks lynn

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Thank you, Andrew :)

[WittyWonka]

Your few words say so much about what we all need in life so that when death occurs there can be light enough to sustain the one still here. This is deep.

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Thank you for your comments, dear poet :)

[softlyfall]

You know what I love? I love a poem that resonates in me, that I can feel but not quite grok...so I have to carry it away with me and look at it over and over, turn it over to see the underside, hold it up to the light and sleep with it under my pillow until it feels like I understand it.
So, thank you. For this.

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hahaha coming from you...an amazing compliment my dear :) Thank YOU for THIS

[A hare off]

Personally I liked it a lot. "Be alive more than your casual death." Great line as well as "Rise from the chambers of your stars". So many thoughts are invoked with just these lines and the rest of the poem frames your thoughts nicely.

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So kind, Hare. Thank you for stopping by, dear poet :)