Dark

His dark mood was calm

And with a look in his eyes

That spoke of patience...

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

Ah, finally got one!!
(utilized 30 minutes to leaf through your poetry to see which one left "un-reviewed". Damn!)

Nevermind, here i go:

Every single time when the word "patience" comes before my very eyes & its symphony reverberate across the chandelier of my tres mind, i do visualize, what i would already imply to you, once, a long time, back, since me & you, were just a tint of time - a hue of "privacy", & i blew that ... "every man is a dog, but gentlemen be just the "patient-wolf". And i do hope, you do remember, whatever i would crop, whilst you were just shrugging at me & i was gawking at you like mob! (gansta)

what does that even mean?
am i drunk or took morphine?
what the hell am i typing about?
i don't even know how to applaud "DARK", wow whao
very prolific, captivating & flourishing poetry you pen'd down
yes, i do agree, even a man is f-moody just like Adams hailed from east-town
his dark mood, yes, was and is clam
but as since you keep dancing 'pon his realm,
am afraid to say, for how long he'll be in your soften palm?
wham!
you ladies keep men right in the fist of your fisty hands
first you pass 'em smile & then get ready to be friends
o' yes, this's counted on counterfiet trend
shining like a sun up in the sky, men & women make love all night
& when it comes to bitter-sweet-sweeten-bites,
oh yeah you filthy hot ladies say, "his dark mood with the look in his eyes
spoke allot of his patience so let get rolled down till light."

Isn't it whatcha intended to say, huh? "Roller-Coaster from west-coast.

Very beauteous poetry, sweetheart just as sweeten-sugary as the apple pies of your butts. You kinky mama! Looking forward to reading your latest work, wanna say: Ahan? *wink*

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:) Thank you, my friend. I am truly humbled by your enthusiasm for this little ditty :)

[Adam Adams]

Little ditty? What yah say huh nitty gritty?
Is that kinda like of nitty witty?
Huh.. tell me something, pretty?
Ya enjoy the ride of.. little ditty? Huh mrs. Sweety.
Ain't my humor quite witty? Oh hell yeah..
So wanna get on nother ride of mr. Creepy weedy? Ha!

[Adam Adams]

... am real breaking woodie, nudy. Lol

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smirk................

[Adam Adams]

Only smirk? No shrug this time, lil prime? Lo

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

I am always amazed at how so much can be said in so few words! To have a dark mood and be calm is quite interesting...many things come to mind, but my own experiences are projected onto this, of course. Perhaps, he is a somewhat tortured poet who has come to know that the darkness will pass with time and find its way into a poem. So well done! I will be thinking on this for some time.

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Thank you, my dear :)

[Willard Wells]

I wanted, at first, to say I saw myself in your work, but you went and through in that "patience" word. Well, that takes me out of the mix. Well done short verse.

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Ah, but you hang onto the love, and that is the patience that keeps you coming back :) Thank you, Willard!

[Woody]

mmm dark mood, calm and patience. the person is definitely brooding. scheming some evil deed. I'm sure a second stanza would prove me right. this sounds like my wife when I've been out with the boys.
anyway, I like this. it speaks volumes.

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hahahahahahaha you do all kinds of bad things when you go out, huh? Thanks for coming by and flashing your light on my page, Woody :)

[Woody]

pleasure, charming poet :)

[Junction]

It got me thinking. He was in a dark calm mood with the look of patience in his eyes.
My take he was annoyed, but trying to understand. Maybe come up with a solution. I had seen
this expression myself on people. That is where I think it is going.

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:) thank you for stopping by

[Great Aunt Astri]

Patience, something we all need!

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Thank you, dear poet :)

[JayceeC]

This is interesting. Dark moods and calmness seem to be diametrically opposed as dark moods are often associated with anger which is rarely calm. But this seems to speak to me. It's as if he's resigned to working out the problem without showing his temper to intervene. It's that look that says I'm pissed, but I'm not going anywhere. This is a nice senryu, Lynn. It makes your reader think about the situation beyond what's on the page.

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Thank you, Jan :)

[E G TEN]

You have your way with words Lynn, a few words but it's enough
Way cool, Thanks E G

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Hi E G good to see you by :) I will come visit you soon and thank you

[emmajoy]

A brevity of meaning, dear friend... you know how it is.

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Luv your visits Em...thank you

[A hare off]

This poem reads softly, in a quiet voice of understanding and affection. That is how I see it. Even in his darkest moments he remained steady and sure. Really good Lynn.

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Thank you, dear poet :)