Entwined

Where my thoughts tingled yours

In our sky, the clouds in hue

of dark fashioned happiness.

An embrace of your deepest

Inner feelings, saluted mine,

Two hearts

One beat

Softly, tenderly

The rhythm of intense passion

Entwined us as colliding stars

Where darkness, became our

Supernova, a dance of

You and me--unending

Reviews

[David Scott]

I like the declaration. Eternal! "Entwined" for eternity only because two have become one and each hold a knowledge of their immortality.
Beautiful.

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Thank you so much :)

[SkinlessFrank]

I often wonder what it is about this so special gift of life, what dimension we are transported to, whether it is a near as we can ever be to the fires of creation while still on this planet, and then just like that, we are back again, we hear the birds, or a telephone, or a neighbour's dog; but where were we just before that? Your poem places me back there.

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I am honored, SF, truly. Thank you so much :)

[Cryingkate]

Another Beautiful Write lynn,
So gracefully done as always.
Reminds of a Ballerina's choreography of danced words.

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Thank you, Kate, for quite a lovely compliment

[wordman]

we enter with in each other,our hearts lock,our souls make love,the solace we can find

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Thank you, Ron :)

[An owl on the moon]

What a profoundly rich vision of love being woven together in the threads of night and the rhythms of wanting. One tapestry unfolds in your words, lynn.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this like two people's deepest insides making love---much more than just bodies tingling each other.

what an embrace this poem is...i held it for awhile.

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Love is the true rapture of the soul, my friend :) As always...I am honored to have you by, dear poet

[E G TEN]

Awesome poem Lynn, unending" Thanks!

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Thank you, sir :)

[emmajoy]

' The rhythm of intense passion -- Entwined us as colliding stars .. '

Your words really do weep diamonds, lynn. These days there's an ever present sadness, yet you finish with tender sighs rather than raging groans. To add that there's grace in your writing - maybe reads a little too much.. but, tis meant. .

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Thank you so much my dear Emma :)

[emmajoy]

A sadder than sad pleasure... thank YOU.

[Adam Adams]

Liked how beautiful you play with words:
"Two hearts... One beat..." Lovely.

Very dulcet & impassioned poetry it is... has a way to touch readers's spirits, deeply. I find the scents, the allure of love, lust, romance, & a wee bit mixture of erotic romance, sugar and spicy flavors of enraged penetration... in it which, certainly... portraying the seduction of two uncontrolled hearts but of one racy spirit. Wonderful work!

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Thank you Adams :)

[Willard Wells]

Nicely done and I expect it could go without the mature warning, but to each his own. I have marked some of my work this way and even then I am not sure. I liked this a great deal, very nice.

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Ya I wasn't sure about the Mature listing, but just in case. Thank you so much Willard :)