Gone

And every night I stood there,

waiting for another sunset to catch-

but these voices in my dreams,

called me back, purging my skin

with their tongues, like washing of

my sins.

How could I not love him ? My wind,

the tossing and burning glory of

my entire existence, his eyes-my rain,

and his hands the soft caress of my

dark hair, the chaos of my heart.

I was alive. And now? Now all I see are

clouds, and my sun is gone, it tries to

whirl his flames upon me, but maybe I am

blindfolded by will...maybe I am gone?

Reviews

[David Scott]

Boy how I know this place...
Oh, but I know you well enough to say for certainty you are not gone.
We need to learn to be whole and present even within a relationship.
Then, with our lover or without we offer our fullness to ourselves and our love.
A hard lesson to learn.
When we use love interest to complete us the disaster is inevitable.

[...]

I wrote this shortly after my lover died. I was bleeding. Sometimes I still do. Thank you for your words, my friend

[David Scott]

I'm so sorry for your loss.
I have not had a death, but I had to shut out and shut off a true love...
I do know the pure suicidal feeling. The hopelessness is suffocating.
I had to learn to be whole. I was midlife and I was never even close to being independently whole.
Sorry if I projected. It was not my intention to minimize your loss.

[...]

:) It's ok, David. I appreciate your thoughts and what you are trying to do, my friend

[David Scott]

Honestly, just trying to be a friend. No agenda other than to inspire and be inspired by transparent art and sharing.
Thank you for your tolerance and openness.
I wouldn't know what I know without having been there emotionally myself.

[...]

((((((((((((you))))))))) it's all good, David :)

[MelissaAndres]

Very nice. Sad and heartfelt. So many emotions. You did a very nice job with this! I enjoyed reading it.

[MOON]

Beautiful poignant write, gone encapsulates those feelings , heartfelt .

[...]

((( U )))) good seeing you Moon :)

[Mr. Stage Four]

Powerful and thought-provoking piece of writing.

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Thank you :)

[Philip Muls]

Very authentic write about a deep feeling of loss.

I was alive...that says it all. Once you have tasted through love...
If you can..please review my story Lovesick.

[emmajoy]

' And every night I stood there, - waiting for another sunset to catch-'

When someone you love with every part of your body and spirit disappears from sight, tis as if you've lost your shadow. How can the sun make sense of that, how can anyone else?

Your writing is extraordinary.. tis real, tis special.

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Thank you my dear sweet Emma :) To have you say that to me, is special ((( U )))

[emmajoy]

Hug returned.

[Adam Adams]

"blindfolded by will?" What a beautiful & astounding way to express the emotions of heart. I must say, very intellectual write you've come up with. Around the world, there's so much love, light and peace, though somehow, there's, of course, nothing "left" love, light and peace", but the stereotypes of "memories". I believe, if there's no love, there's no memories so quite obviously, the "GONE" portraying here the conversation of one love-heart with lost-mind .. what all spirit wants is love, but the love's lost in the midst of time so you ask to yourself:

"I was alive, Ah.. ohh.. was I alive?
What all I see are clouds, & sun that's gone... "

Wonderfully expressed. One of my fav. writes, after all, it's drooled with so much insights/envisions & labyrinths of ones mind/heart. Beautiful write. Great job! ;)

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Thank you, Adams :)

[An owl on the moon]

Such a deeply painful, introspective world you bring to life. These haunting questions burn deep into the mind and heart so bitterly.

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thank you, my friend :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, i felt this one a ton....i felt drops of rain...and that strong breeze of memory.

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Thank you so much, Jacob. I'm honored :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are a terrific, writer, lynn,

i get much enjoyment from reading your words...you have your unique way of phrasing...of putting things together....always a whole that comes from the well drawn together parts.

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Jacob...((( you ))) that means a lot to me. Thank you!

[B]

Missing someone is really hard
somehow
you wait every night
you cant control it

and that is beautiful

love your write here
i feel like i am sitting next to you while you wrote this

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Thank you so much :)

[B]

My pleasure :)
Have a gorgeous day