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The title is deliberately untitled

I am the moonless midnight

unfolding unto sorrowful skies,

the sable shadow unwound...

The hour is one of infinite dark

where stars are the dying flames

and light is but an echo,

a faded memory unto eternity

Reviews

[Pryde Foltz]

If we only understood that all of what we see is but the echo of thought. Love your pen:)

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Thank you so much, my dear :)

[J]

i wonder how it is i've not read you before ...? your words wind their way into a sadness of the wee hours of alone ~~ unexpress.able most often, but you have written this rich treasure while surely standing beside me in those moonless hours. truly memorable articulation, dear poet.

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Well, You have read me now, and now is all that matters :) Thank you for your wonderful review J :)

[J]

my pleasure entirely :)

[David Scott]

How darkly thy poetry enlightens... (I might have to write a poem with this theme.)
Upon the nameless void of space your words provide a substance to hold the light of meaning and understanding.
Well penned. Inspirational.

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:) Thank you, my dear poet

[roarke]

moonless midnight
sorrowful skies
sable shadows
infinite dark
stars are dying flames
light is but an echo
faded memories.....

even without the "un's" its a nice little piece.

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:) Thank you Roarke

[emmajoy]

'The hour is one of infinite dark .. where stars are the dying flames .. '

You've created another place and time with this beautifully sad piece of writing. Can't guess why this hour changed you but, maybe it's where you need to be... or not. Decision to be made.. or not.

Whether truth or otherwise, there's a deep chestful of emotions here.

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life is a salad bowl of decisions, isn't Emma? Good to see you, my friend :)

[emmajoy]

Yes, it is. I know - too well. (You).

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((( U ))) Hope things are better for you, my friend

[emmajoy]

Decided only recently that we must be in charge of our lives, even to accepting that things aren't always perfect. Two days later, still thinking/feeling that way... will let you know in a week. Smiling, nodding and soon to slide into the 3D world as dusk settles.. :)

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hahahaha I am all tooo familiar with that,Sweets. I will let you know too :)

[emmajoy]

Smiling along with you... gotta larf! :)

[~]

Oh my.. i can feel your soul grieve for the brevity of all things around us..
A very strong and sensory write. The darkness seeps in so easily..
xx

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Thank you skittles :)

[-Scribe in Style-]

'stars are dying flames'
Such depth and two simple, often romantic symbols, put together creates a meaning that really requires some thought.
And 'light is but an echo'
The connection of waves traveling in the air, but instead of sound, since the 'sorrowful skies' are 'shadowed' you are comparing light waves.
The imagery you have brought out is an vision of someone being out in that midnight hour and attempting to take in all that is in it's surrounding.
Good work.
So many events could be linked to your description, makes one want to create their own lasting memory.
A

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Thank you so much, dear poet :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Such an emotive write! The words are a bit foreboding. Makes one wonder just what happened on that moonless evening. Good one. Lydi**

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Thank you Lydi :)

[rubie]

it's a funny thing...i don't like to use "untitled" for any of my pieces, even when i struggle to come up with a title and nothing seems right.

but this one, my friend, needs to be "untitled", in my opinion because it just simply needs to be experienced by the reader without any preconceived notions.

I love being enveloped in darkness. It's soothing and calming to me.

Your last line is magnificent. Well penned....

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Thank you so much, Rubie. I'm glad you agree with the title. I too felt it fit :))

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~~ wow... ~~ this beautiful and poignant piece reminds me of how i feel... but of course... i couldn't begin to say this as poetically as you do, lady lynn... and again... a more than splendid opening line... i've read a lot of people write about a moonless night but moonless midnight is just spectacular poetic expression... belongs in another realms of excellence... and the alliteration makes the expression shine even more... ~~ truly inspiring stuff, lady lynn...

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Serah, you always make me smile :))))

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~~ and what a privilege that is, lady lynn... :)