Tired

I'm tired.
The kind of tired that sleep doesn't relieve.
The kind that makes things I loved before you
loose their flavor.
I try to catch a breeze, reach,
suck in some fun, some sun,
wish upon a star...
hope...
It's stale.
It's all stale.
I don't have a reason anymore.
Days are so mechanical
nights are sleepless nightmares
I should have never loved you.
Should have kept my space.
Should have never let you touch me!
What the hell was the point?
I cared for what?
You made me care for what?
 This?
To rip and tare me more?
To make me feel?
congratulations! I feel.
I'm more lonely now than before
What i am, is, all that love has accomplished...
Pain!
 All the rest is camouflage.
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Reviews

[Adam Adams]

"I cared for what?... You made me care for what... " These're true feelings of heart you've come up with simply & painful words. Yes, love makes people thinking ov'r such thoughts deeply on nights.. on days... even in their whole lives to know the reason, why they loved or beloved! But they ain't find that's not even existed. Liked the imagery. Well done!

[silent poet]

wow, that was agonizing and beautiful. sweet sorrow. your words grasping through pain, I feel it so I truly deeply feel this!! you've done a extremely great job at letting go!! and facing your feels, no matter how much it hurt ...


(the kind of tired that sleep doesn't relieve ) the worst kind of tired lynn

[Samuel Dickens]

The line that jolted me is, "I should have never loved you." That's pretty tough, but I understand. We must take chances in love, but boy can things go wrong.

[Matching Socks]

You've described in the bottom half the pain of heart ache which then leads to that numb feeling in the upper half. Totally honest raw emotions.

[andrew mitchell]

Another power write to extremes. well written lynn

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

strength is never a camouflage...it is never hidden enough to not be felt. I feel strength. find strength in others and you will be amazed at how much you see in yourself. YOU ARE WORTHY!

[sereenaoutloud]

wow this is so strong...you feel the anger, the pain. That feeling of it all having had been worthless and how it only left you feel worse than before. Wishing you had never opened up your heart.
Brilliant Lynn!! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Easy to feel bad. Harder to say fudge-it and laugh at life.
"I'm more lonely now than before
What i am, is, all that love has accomplished...
Pain!
All the rest is camouflage."
Year ago I was seeking a early death. Woman with three children gave me reason to live and laugh. I'm glad I found her and the kids. I would be long gone without her. Camouflage is needed. I play many parts. I enjoy time with grandchildren now. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

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:))) again...you have turned life into a huge pot of nourishment for the rest of us, kind sir

[Coyote Poetry]

I tried. I lost too many in my life already. Putting four brothers into graves. left me with a listening ear and concern. Every life is worth something.

[Sami Khalil]

I felt the pain and agonizing awareness in this powerful poem. Reality of things went wrong can have a lastingimpact. Excellent...:).....I

[Willard Wells]

As they say better to have loved and lost than to never have loved. I have felt the emptiness and pain of a lost love and the pain is great, but as time goes on the pain eases and you are left with the happy memories. A new love is just around the corner. The one that feels the same about you as you do them. Great write. I liked it a great deal.

[MsJewel]

Your words are painful to read.
I try to catch a breeze, reach,
suck in some fun, some sun,
wish upon a star...
Keep trying. The breeze, the sun, the stars they will wait for you to heal...

:) Julie