The Night That Day Said No

I was tempted the day
i saw the needle in the sky
a very strange sight indeed
when a purple penguin dies
and when the word is silent
for fear that all is lost
will you come to save us all
or create a hollocaust?
for all i see is you my love
and all i know is dust
will you come to save the world
or let the whole world rust?
let's set the world on fire
and burn it to the sky
and when the people scream in fear
we all shall watch them cry
but will you save the souls my love?
or let them die in fear?
will you be the one they forever hate
or the one for which they cheer?
when the son of fame and fortune
is seen by all and none
and money held by many
is only held by one
can any make the words sound right
or all left unheard?
will you let the people speak, my love?
or silence every word?

Reviews

[james miles]

"can any make the words sound right
or all left unheard?
will you let the people speak, my love?
or silence every word?"
...this is a wonderful poem:)

[BrokenButterfly]

Thanks! I appreciate the kind words

[Distantview123]

This has a surreal quality to it, with poetic imagery throughout. A powerful write!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

let's set the world on fire
and burn it to the sky

I love that play on words, also it says to me, along with the poem as a whole that you can't follow the "so called rules" when it comes to love. Nice work.

[Sami Khalil]

I like questions in a poem...

[B-poet]

What a gripping piece of writing. Very poetic, lots of deepth and it's illustrious. Great poignant touch as well. Nice work.

[Samantha Ashley]

I like this one it made me think about what your love would say. Nice job! :)

[Harmonica winds]

My goodness!!!!
Such a powerful read, love the start of this write.
You are a very talented writer. I like this alot!

[courtridicule]

dahling...you dance divinely

[Ben Taylor]

It was a great poem, but I'm not sure if the reference to a purple penguin was something I just didn't recognize or if it was simply random..lol.

[BrokenButterfly]

Comments weren't a thing when you made this review, but now that they are, I'll ease your mind. I was young, my writing showed it. The purple penguin thing was just because it rhymed. I'm obviously not too much older now, but I think my writing has matured a lot since then. Perhaps I'll revisit this work one day and make a line that makes more sense. Thanks for your review!

[Hatchling]

WOW!!! this is great!!!