My First Poem

Raindrops on a leaf

some puddles under a tree

raining down on me.

Author's Note

This was an excerise in a fourth grade spelling book believe it or not. If I remember correctly we were supplied the vocabulary word "raindrops" and instructed to write a hiku around it. This was my very first poem and if you read into it can be about sadness building up slowly or it can simply be about rain. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder, and I would love to know what your thoughts are.

Reviews

[Phantom Heart]

Amazing! Beyond fantastic! I see the building of sadness as I read this poem, it seems to grow every time I read it.

[Wildecat]

Wow this a fantastic poem for someone in the forth grade.

[Emily B]

Very pretty! A lovely image.

[dilettante1890]

Very pretty! And for a fourth grader it's fantastic. I can only assume you are a terrific writer now.

[lauren emily]

Nice! I liked this. It was short and yet it said a lot.
Good work,
~Lauren

[Last Lying Look]

oh. very cute. short and simple.

[Scyoni]

I get some interesting mental images of water. Someone dancing in the rain, or sulking soaking wet. Nice choice of words.

[RAWR!]

nice,
i think this is the best haiku ive read this year.