A Welcomed Stranger

Can you feel
These
Rhythmic
Waves
Flowing through
You
Sung into
The
Voices in your brain

Taste my craze in vibratto
Welcome strange
I'm deranged because you're hollow

All my numbers are sick
The absolution of six
I'd fill you in, but I'm too tired
And all your sins are said in context

Reverse my light
Invite this crooked knife into my heart
The sacrifice
Letting go of what we know
So we'll become
Who we truly are

Who are you?

I'm the suffered
I'm the refuse
I'm your excuse
I'm your savior
I'm the sad that makes you better
Born to blame
A welcomed stranger

Reviews

[James O'Rourke]

Have to say I dig this poem, transentience! I love the whole flow of it. The rhythm is awesome. It starts out staccato and the rumbles right into a nice rhyme scheme with backbone. I second Lovecraft's huzzah for the second stanza. It's like butter when I say it out loud.

Also, the fourth stanza does something fun. You write "Reverse my light/Invite this crooked knife into my heart/The sacrifice." I love how you did that. Tell the reader to "reverse the light" and proceed to reverse the rhyme to the first word of your next line.

I look forward to reading more of your work. Keep it up!

[Lovecraft]

"Taste my craze in vibratto
Welcome strange
I'm deranged because you're hollow"

I love this stanza for some reason.

Overall, it's dark and the ending is fairly powerful and weirdly delightful. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ..welcome stranger ..come on in and let me dump on you a bit ...eeeyouch! your aim is true ..can't say as i have read a poem on such a perspective ...satire that is almost politely put ... reminds me most of Jesus Christ who (it is written) told all around He came to take the sin of the world upon Himself ...since no one else can ;))))
E.
ps. love this poem ... it gritty and provokes my thought and self examinations as well ..

[Fanicia E.]

I think you've done an amazing job! Personally, the line that resonate with me most was "The sacrifice is letting go of what we know So we'll become Who we truly are"