Laments of the Emotionless

Colour blind or sad?

Supposedly others see colour.

I'm meant to believe rainbows

are not just characteristic to fairy tales,

That trees really change colour in autumn?

But I don't see it.

My world exists in shades.

The sunset is not pink

or red

or orange.

All I see is grey.

Cold. 

Dead.

Grey.

Author's Note

To continue my odes to mental destruction.

Reviews

[Amber Lily]

Wow, well that sad. Haha but I think the only reason for that is because color blind people have to hear about all of the colors from the people with normal vision. If we all saw without color, it wouldn't seem so dead, and we would find beauty within it somewhere. Beauty is in everything, color or not :)

[Riley Justine]

This poem is referring to the colourless and emotionless life those with depression often experience. But thank you for your thoughts! The last part is especially insightful :)

[mou]

I believe it is far better to discover the grey color at the beginning rather than to find it from a puzzle of beautiful color at later or perfectly speaking after a big 'later'. Here I like your thought and way to emerge the title with its content.beautiful write

[Riley Justine]

Thank you so much for your review :)

[Neal S]

Simple but emotionally jarring. I don't mean that in a negative way. I really dig this piece.

[Riley Justine]

Thank you so much!

[Paul Bell]

Nothing wrong with seeing grey for a time. We can all pretend we live in colour. But we would all be lying.
I love black. But it's all just how you feel that day.

[Riley Justine]

Thanks for your thoughts :)

[Hebe]

Wow...incredible, my heart just dropped to the ground... it painted the picture instantaneously. .....thank you for sharing!

[Riley Justine]

I'm glad it effected you so strongly :)
Thank you for reviewing!

[Asya Kardzhaliyska]

First of all, I want to start with something positive! The theme of your poem was interesting and current, however I felt as though your ending stanza was a bit abrupt and sudden and there wasn't enough build up to it. Your line about the sunset was beautifully done!

There is one minor thing that I could suggest and it's the font style, I found it a little bit distracting from the actual content of the poem but like I said it's a minor thing so it's entirely up to you whether or not you choose to listen to me! Keep up the good work! :)

[Riley Justine]

Thanks for the review :)
The ending is supposed to be abrupt and thank you for the feedback on the font! I always appreciate some critiquing :)

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I think you've captured the state of mental destruction well! Simply expressed but highly effective. Starz

[Riley Justine]

Thank you :)

[Coyote Poetry]

To see the world in black and white. Would make our vision different. I liked the feel of realness and dark thoughts. Thank you Riley for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Riley Justine]

Thank you for reviewing :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Bala Gorthi]

You have very well brought out the state of mental destruction. What an ode!
There may be beauty but I don't see it ,all my world exists in grey ,i see only shades..
It is a sincerely put write with your words showing the pathetic state of one in depression or in mental destruction. Very cold, dead and grey.. There couldn't have been better words..
Take a bow from me for this write, my friend.
Keep writing more..
Thank you for this touching write..:-):-):-)

[Riley Justine]

Thank you so much for reviewing :)
I love what you got out of this poem!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think without suffering we could never actually realize what is joy to us.. Also I think its all part of life.. There is a quote in my part of the world which goes like: "God never gives anyone more pain that they can bear".. I dunno if its out of the context from your poem, nevertheless I felt like sharing this...But I like how you describe the feelings in characters of colours. Good work :)

[Riley Justine]

Thanks for this review! I have definitely heard that quote before and believe there is some truth to it. However, often it feels like God hands us more than we can deal with

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Well maybe it feels like it but its all about trust... You are welcome!! It was a pleasure ☺