Eye look at I

Eye look at I

 

Two blues,

gray-rimmed,

and dark

at the center---

I am, too: blues,

and dark

at the center.

 

Growing old

does things

sometimes,

like withers you,

or hardens,

or gives you luck

enough to dance

all summer on

a lawn strewn

with violets.

 

Reviews

[J. Hampton]

Didn't turn out a bit as I thought it might...a definite "feel-good" piece
J ~ sent it....

"I am, too: blues, ~ Fab verse here ...and so it truly can be
and dark
at the center."


"or gives you luck
enough to dance
all summer on
a lawn strewn
with violets." ~ ......................Priceless imagery and mood

The way you sprinkle the ending with a carefree tone ....brought this work...to a different level

Niiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiice Poetics


Blessssssssssssssss

[Brett Campaigne]

this whispers softly and travels like a notion in the wind, maybe it will lay a boon across the faces of those who it passes by and through.

[L.G. Knight]

so sweet and endearing.... very well done and I lvoe the title!

~Frances~