Novel Teaser-first few sentences(pre rough-draft)

A small teaser of the novel I am currently in the middle of writing. This is basically the first few sentences.

Several years ago, the unthinkable occured. I entered a new world, so to speak. Now, this didn't happen when I found a secret portal, or cast a magic wand. It was much simpler than that. Yet, it was completely unexplainable at the same time. At the age of thirteen my entire life was turned around in a single moment. Everything I knew was lost, but something else seemed to take its place. A new type of knowledge that I hadn't contained before. My story is long, but it has to be told.

Author's Note

Keep in mind that this I am still basically getting my ideas down now so I have not even started on my rough-draft. So the writing is not my best yet.

Reviews

[Max Murphy]

Intriguing, quite ambiguous, but in a good way; after all, what good is a teaser that tells too much. Your structure and vocabulary are impressive for your age, and your writing has a nice fluidity to it. Only point is; the first few lines, the sentences are very short and could be separated with a comma instead of a period, or full stop, whatever your preferred terminology. This would help the sentences flow much better and wouldn't preempt so many stops.

You must post the novel this pertains to or point me in the direction of said novel, I'm eager to read more, Max.