Black and White

I posted this once, deleted it to edit. Now I'm re-posting.

Watching the moon as it peaks high on the dark moonlit sky

Afternoon troubles didn’t get me so high.

You left and I cried

There is no meaning.

I’m letting myself go

From a person so demeaning.

 

You’ve turned my world in a topsy-turvy state

I put you so high up on that pedestal.

I’m breaking, wishing, that it didn’t have to go that far.

But it did.

 

So for now, let’s start life anew.

No more pretenses and dire situations.

You can’t pull one on me, you never did, so I’m letting this go.

I’ve been your so-called companion, but I’ve never treated you as such.

I used to long for your sweetest embraces and your very kind touch.

Whenever I was down.

 

Scratch that.

 

Whenever you were down I’d rescue you from them all

Does this sound like a bittersweet thrall?

Of long sentences that don’t seem to make sense.

Because truth of the matter is

You never were there much

You were there to diss.

 

Never expected much from you

Not even now.

 

But I at least wanted to feel appreciated

For all the things that I’ve done.

What caused all this I shudder to recall.

That one simple afternoon when I fell asleep

You can’t forgive me for that one little slip?

 

How ‘bout all the times when I’ve had your back

And you’ve let me down time and time again?

Don’t think I want to continue this charade

I don’t think I wanna be called your friend.

 

But here’s what’s most important of them all.

I love you, but I won’t be there anymore

To catch you, when you fall.

Reviews

[Boldpen]

Hummm... really lovely write.,
the flow was just enchanting.
Sad... but full of grace.
the expressions were extremely powerful and feelings greatly on the surface.
this was what made the poem sooo pretty
Great write!

[Lily Mae]

I love the way you said "scratch that".. I felt as if I were right there with you in that moment of decision... very well done..xx

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

True heartbreaking confessions of the emotionally drained.
This was exactly like the curse of Atlas.

Your words are touching.

[TadKent]

Very raw and revealing, but good for you. :) Loved how you said what you had to say. :)

[JC]

honest, real and raw..i like it.

[J.S. Pua]

I thought this would bore me coz this piece is long..
but not really..
great painful write..

[Iota]

It seems like a lot of pain in this one behind even more anger. Deserved anger I imagine no less. I think putting people on a pedalstol is setting them up to fail you for no one can stay up there forever. It is funny how you can help someone constantly when they make mistakes and the one time you fail they think it is the end of the world. Great passionate write.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I always tell people to try this experiment, get two people of relative equal size and strength, get one to stand on the bed and let the other stand on the floor. Now, have them hold hands and tug as hard at each other as they can. Is it easier do you think for the person on the pedestal to lift the other up to their level or is it easier for them to be toppled down? There is more than a lesson in gravity to be learned there. I liked this write, it shows an understanding already of just what I mean.

[Liza]

very insightful write on the realization that sometimes we place others on a pedestal and praise them as love; a grounded submission of acceptance that the author was not born to save another even though the high gets us out of the low...