Distress

SOS.

Running,
escaping,
past the brushes,
tripping,
stumbling,
falling,
crashing,
burning.
Tears forming,
fists clenched,
hair pulled,
heart wrenched.
Hope smashed,
dreams trashed.
Dead or alive,
it doesn't matter.
Self pity treats,
but doesn't cure.
Breaking walls,
kicking doors.
All I really
need right now
is to feel the
warmth of a soul
wrapping their arms
around my shaking body
pulling me into
a
human
hug.

Author's Note

Hey, I am getting a lot of complaints that I don't use these: ;;;
I have a confession: I don't know how to. Help!

~Written for a friend in a really hard time~

Reviews

[roarke]

yeah, ask James Joyce or John Updike how they chose to use ;;;;;;, ha. Communication, empathy, mythology, concept, loving to write, that's what it's all about.... punctuation? meh. btw am I too old to be a fan boy? lol. Good stuff don't ever stop.

[Essy]

no idea how to use them. your talking about the i-have-no-idea-how-i-got-into-freshman-year-my-spelling-is-so-atrocious- girl here. haha

[Bella-Marie]

I don't use those weird thingys either, and I hope I am never told off for doing so. I enjoyed this poem immensley, if I was your friend in need I would be very happy I had a friend like you.
The free-verse style worked well for you.

[Thorn]

Hey, Tophatgirl. I can't use them either!

I just chuck them into random places, instead of a comma. It seems to work.
*shrugs*

Anyway, a brilliant poem! You could have maybe used a couple more commas at the ends on lines, but that's no biggie. You did a good job, and should be proud. ^^

I hope your friend is alright now, though.