Something Else

Train track treks of finding hope.
Blank postcards of lost destiny.
Empty kisses of lies and cheats.
Fluttering dreams escaping windows.
Folding laundry to forget sorrow.
Endless fields of sleeping memories.
Letters to dwell on.
Fitful nightmares to agree on.
Regrets to tell,
tears to swell.
Expecting something.
Anything.
In this city of remorse.

Reviews

[Song]

Iiii like it.

[Mai Aliza]

I really enjoyed your poem. It was well rounded, meaning I didn't like one line more than the another, each line to me perfect in its own way. It all fit together like a perfect puzzle; no pieces missing. And the emotion that you put into it, really made me want to read it; it wasn't boring. Great write.

[Bella-Marie]

A very sad, sombre and almost dark poem, but well-written. The title didn't seem to make sense but I did enjoy it immensley. Great rhyming thrown in there. Maybe just re-read it and see if you can point out a few bits that seem... wrong.
Just trying to give you some feedback on an almost perfect poem.
Bella!