Save Me

A poem.

Fading away,
darkness comes,
threatens to take,
over my world.

I let it seep,
into my soul,
taint my beauty,
poison my will.

When I cry out for help,
the yell echoes.
Into the madness,
I go because nobody cared.

Nobody cared.

Never appreciated,
the good life,
when I had it.
 Now it's gone.
 Never to return.

 Please, come back.
Please, I'll behave.
I just want to feel
the warmth.

The sun, laughter, not a care in the world.
It's all gone now.
Because of my selfish ways.
Save me.

Author's Note

Help.

Reviews

[Wolfe Greytome]

This piece has a terrific base with a lot of potential. Your subject matter here is very solid. Your wording is well thought out. However, your rhythm is unbalanced and somewhat choppy. With a little work, this piece will go from terrific to exceptional.

[Bella-Marie]

I reckon this would have been a great poem if it wasn't for the fact as soon as I saw the title I thought of the Queen song 'Save me'! Otherwise, really sad but really gorgeous, i love it (apart from Freddie Murcury bleating in the back of my head "SAVE ME, SAVE ME...")

[Pen The Willows]

I love it! It's sad, but very poetic. Best poem I've read in a long time. Simple, elegant. Great job!