Lighter than a Weather

This piece got published for a good cause at "Circus of Indie Artist Poetry Winter 16" please check it out on Amazon .....

Climbing out of mercy

Running into woods

A small drop of dew

Left there to call

The longest hair

Has finally descended

She looks inside a pot

To make another story

Unfailing to become

The eyes to give 

On sudden calling

Awaken too heavy

Stumbling by the chair

Dropping pennies

Staring up for an answer

The darkness spotted

A blind place 

She wanders 

Crying out of castles

Aided by the healer

To return all blessings

Into the corner of seeders

A white drum of chimes

Flutes telling a tale

A lady stood a chance

Steering her to relief 

Understanding an older uncle

That held her behind his cloak

Allowing no sight

To pierce her eyes again 

Reviews

[Akshita]

It is such an interesting piece! : )

[Nisreen]

Thank you :)

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Interesting poesy. Worth delving into and in between the lines! Ttyfs!

[Nisreen]

Thanks for stopping by

[PhoenixDown]

Interesting. I will have to check out Amazon. I work with autistic students. I shall leave another review. Twas a long day for day 1 of vacation. But this caught my eye & I wanted to comment.

[Nisreen]

I wish I could have a job like that ..... enjoy your vacation buddy

[PhoenixDown]

Regardless of the choice one makes, you are left wondering of the others. Don't wish too hard.
Enjoy those numbers!

[T. Edana Talbott]

Such a mysterious and thoughtful piece. You write so beautifully, miss. Always :)

[Nisreen]

Thank you so much :)

[Paul Bell]

First, congratulations on getting published. The depth of your writing really does leave us in awe. The last two lines. Did she get her sight back, but it was snatched away again.

[Nisreen]

I guess .... she is trying to figure that out .... thank you Paul

[Joshua Haines]

Vary nice. This one really got to me XD

[Nisreen]

Thank you so much Joshua

[Einstein Noodle]

mmm mystical and mystery .. reading the first couplet i am saying to myself ..nooo don't run out in the woods :) love the title! (where do you come up with such stuff!) 5th couplet ..tricky indeed ..one has to pay attention eh!? my favorite image induced is :
"Crying out of castles
Aided by the healer"
plus it is a bit of a turn for me .. bringing in the family support warms me ..wise of your protagonist to seek wisdom and protection there ..enjoyed very much! congrats on the published work!!!! way to go! :))))
E.

[Nisreen]

Thank you E

[Lorry]

I can't even compare anything I say about this against what M. Rose left in their review. I think they hit the nail on the head with their observations of the Minutest of detail being so important. The line that connected it all for me was awaking too heavy, that line let everything else fall into place and the ending is so poignantly sad. Beautiful work Curious.

[Nisreen]

Thank you NEmo and i totally agree with you !!

[GalaxyGhost]

Wow! I can see the sadness and beauty mixed in this. I really like the ending stanza most as it gave a strong emotional feeling to the rest of the poem.

[Nisreen]

Thank you for your review :)

[wordman]

sad write,a life of confusion and disease ..you wrote it well

[Nisreen]

Thank you for reading and reviewing