Lighter than a Weather

This piece got published for a good cause at "Circus of Indie Artist Poetry Winter 16" please check it out on Amazon .....

Climbing out of mercy

Running into woods

A small drop of dew

Left there to call

The longest hair

Has finally descended

She looks inside a pot

To make another story

Unfailing to become

The eyes to give 

On sudden calling

Awaken too heavy

Stumbling by the chair

Dropping pennies

Staring up for an answer

The darkness spotted

A blind place 

She wanders 

Crying out of castles

Aided by the healer

To return all blessings

Into the corner of seeders

A white drum of chimes

Flutes telling a tale

A lady stood a chance

Steering her to relief 

Understanding an older uncle

That held her behind his cloak

Allowing no sight

To pierce her eyes again 

Reviews

[Spencer Barker]

Serendipity, I'm sorry I haven't kept up with your writing for a couple months now. But what a nice piece to come back to! This really is a masterpiece; it changes in tide with multiple messages, imagery, and the life of many of your other writings. Nice job, truly. :)

[Nisreen]

Thank you !!!!

[Nwang]

Good work.I like the flow of your poetry.Thoroughly enjoyed it.
P.S If you have not read Tagore, read his poems I think you will enjoy them.

[Nisreen]

Thanks and I will check them out

[Emily]

The fist stanza is got to be my favorite!
Well done!

[Nisreen]

Thanks Emily

[Misha_Anya]

This is just a really cool down to earth but yet at the same time so far out there poem i especially love the references to the musical instruments. Well done.

[Nisreen]

Thanks Misha

[Wolf_Lord]

Interesting imagery, and I liked the flow... I was slightly distracted by the lines that rhymed as most did not. Overall however I really enjoyed it.
Wolf ,'', ^@@^ ,'',

[Nisreen]

Thank You Wolf

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

fine piece of poetry, Curiosity. Well done. :) rudi

[Nisreen]

Thank You dear Rudi

[Pink Pastel]

Woah great poem nicely done

[Nisreen]

Thank You for your review

[Pink Pastel]

Your welcome ^-^

[Ruth]

Congrats on the publishing :) A balanced flow and one that draws me in...there is much to absorb in this beauty :)

[Nisreen]

Thanks so much Poppy

[PJ Asay]

I'm probably terribly influenced by the media I recently watched well no I am influenced quite easily but I read the whole thing in a British accent and almost singing. Yeah definitely hearing a song like something by Dodie Clark (if you don't know her I recommend I've been like watching her videos for like four days straight) but it starts off and reminds me of like a little girl that finds stories anywhere than a drunk princess than a princess that was kidnapped/or raped specifically those last two stanzas are just off-putting. It really is singsong for not really having an obvious rhyme at least to me. Sorry if I didn't get the proper message and sorry it took me so long to review. It is lovely even if the end is a bit dark to me well done :)

[Nisreen]

Thanks .... Will Check out The singer

[emmajoy]

'Crying out of castles - Aided by the healer.. .. .. To return all blessings - Into the corner of seeders.. .. .. A white drum of chimes - Flutes telling a tale '

For me this was/is a rushing stream that calms into meaning.. There;s sadness and joy here, the darkness and its shadowy light... meanings left to the reader perhaps, to understand or not. A pensive right meant as a little mystery perhaps? Wanting more..

[Nisreen]

Thank You so much for your words

[emmajoy]

Just edited my typos, must have been tired when typing.. so very sorry. A very fine and memorable post...