Serendipity, I'm sorry I haven't kept up with your writing for a couple months now. But what a nice piece to come back to! This really is a masterpiece; it changes in tide with multiple messages, imagery, and the life of many of your other writings. Nice job, truly. :)
This is just a really cool down to earth but yet at the same time so far out there poem i especially love the references to the musical instruments. Well done.
Interesting imagery, and I liked the flow... I was slightly distracted by the lines that rhymed as most did not. Overall however I really enjoyed it.
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I'm probably terribly influenced by the media I recently watched well no I am influenced quite easily but I read the whole thing in a British accent and almost singing. Yeah definitely hearing a song like something by Dodie Clark (if you don't know her I recommend I've been like watching her videos for like four days straight) but it starts off and reminds me of like a little girl that finds stories anywhere than a drunk princess than a princess that was kidnapped/or raped specifically those last two stanzas are just off-putting. It really is singsong for not really having an obvious rhyme at least to me. Sorry if I didn't get the proper message and sorry it took me so long to review. It is lovely even if the end is a bit dark to me well done :)
'Crying out of castles - Aided by the healer.. .. .. To return all blessings - Into the corner of seeders.. .. .. A white drum of chimes - Flutes telling a tale '
For me this was/is a rushing stream that calms into meaning.. There;s sadness and joy here, the darkness and its shadowy light... meanings left to the reader perhaps, to understand or not. A pensive right meant as a little mystery perhaps? Wanting more..
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank You so much for your words
8 Years Ago
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