Loving you

Like an ocean of open books

The rain of stars fell onto the window

Loving you felt so right

Burning a natural shade of paradise

Something real remained in the background

Rising above the concept of torment

Lights ran a crystal course 

We never needed to say much

Like drops of heaven 

Somehow i found a home in your eyes

We created a new age of style

Tranquil in flow to just be

You took me out on dates 

Across the world complimenting my smile 

In a way i became yours

And you were always mine

Without agreement

Living through all disagreements

Loving you was always natural

Forgiving in all

Simply letting go

In peace 

Loving you was just us

Untold 

To make a union

Unquestioned

Yet clearly seen 

in your stroke 

Reviews

[The Fallen King]

Continue the great work!!

[Nisreen]

Thank you for your review

[Darian B.]

This poem is different from most of your other poems, but I like it for its own uniqueness. I don't feel that there are as many layers in this poem but in a lot of ways it's simplicity makes it. There is such a serenity in this piece that simply says, "love beats the world, through a soft voice." I love it, and so many of the lines are just perfect.

[Nisreen]

Thank you Darian

[Lost, n'MT]

Again, I cannot believe nobody else had responded to this. While I am still very early into your work, this is my favorite piece yet. Excellently written and wonderfully expressed piece. Some of my favorite lines;
"Loving you felt so right
Burning a natural shade of paradise"

Strikingly accurate and phenomenally word usage to describe such powerful emotions.

"Like drops of heaven
Somehow i found a home in your eyes"

Beautifully accurate.

"Loving you was always natural
Forgiving in all"

Incredibly honest and accurate, almost to a fault. Not your writing or description, but rather in reference to "forgiving in all"

I also enjoyed "Simply letting go
In peace " and the entire piece in general. Easily my favorite piece I've read from you so far, and I look forward to reading many more!

[Nisreen]

thank you for your reviews :)

[Lost, n'MT]

You're welcome. :)