Prologue: The Missing Girl

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     One clear day Kristie’s dad Tommy wakes up to get her ready for school, when he realizes that she is missing. So he calls the police and tells them about her absence from the house.

 

      After that, he goes and looks for her around town, but does not find her. The next day the police go hunting for her. They found her but she was dead  inside of a pontiac with ridiculously large knife stabbings in her side. So they took her body in to do an autopsy.

 

     The next day they went to the scene where the body was found, and they found the knife thrown out in the woods that was used on the victim.

 

     The fingerprints that were on the knife belonged to her father, so they sent two cops to arrest him. When they got there they found him dead. Lying on the bed beside him was a large army knife. They predicted that he had committed suicide or they had a Pontiac killer on their hands.

 

TO BE CONTINUED...

 

Author's Note

im a begginer.

Reviews

[daftinklings]

This here is more like a summary of a story, rather than a prologue.

Prologues tend to be mysterious, historically informative, or recaps of a previous novel in the series. Most standalone novels don't utilize them, especially ones that aren't either fantasy or science-fiction. However, if you do wish to write a prologue, then I suggest you make it more detailed and emotionally interactive. I feel nothing when I read this. It seems to be more of a newspaper article rather than a story.

[Kloud_Nine]

Hey there dude. Where's the blood and violence - I wanna actually see how it happens. Also this bit makes no sense.You say that they have a Pontiac killer on their hands yet the murder scene had nothing to do with a car. Just do a little bit of editing and it should clear up everything. Nothing big, overall you have good grammer, spelling is passable and there were no outstanding mistakes that I noticed.

This seems more of an introductory bit, hence the Prologue part. Lets see some dialogue and characters in the following chapters.

Good job btw.

[Rain]

hmm, says your a beginner
some tips are to expand on this bit. y'know, add a bit more detail and description.
i thought it almost sounded like a...recount of the weekend. Try to refrain from using after that, then, next, firstly etc

It's an interesting storyline, I can tell you that.
hope your writing will develope and so will this book, gl