Love or Lust?

I was played.

Can someone whose 14 love someone else?

Can they hear the bells?

 

At first I thought so, but then I thought it was just lust I was feeling.

Or quite possibly I was dreaming.

 

I love when he's around me.

He tells me my eyes are like the sea.

 

We innocently flirt.

But in the end I am hurt.

 

His voice is so smooth.

I become numb and can't move.

 

It makes me shiver with excitement.

Which is happening more frequent.

 

He hugs me from behind and whispers in my ear.

Just loud enough so only I can hear.

 

He asked me to a movie.

I couldn't believe he said that to me.

 

I say yes.

What happened next, put me in distress.

 

He let go and started laughing.

 

"You thought I was serious?"

I was suprised at his bitterness.

 

I ran away.

I didn't know was to say.

 

I cryed in my pillow at night.

He really wasn't my knight.

 

Love or lust?

 

I believe love.

But it got thrown away.

Like an old glove.

 

 

Author's Note

How is it?

Reviews

[E.H. Monroe]

You can tell your putting a foot in trying to keep your rhyme here.
I've seen the new stuff. I know the monster that is on its way out in your writing.
Its the beginning of trying to double up on rhyme or rapid fire which is good, cuz its gonna lead to spoken word excellence.
Your current stuff speaks a little louder than this, but still a well put together piece

[akapr17other]

Boys are jerks...most are at least..but i did like the poem:)

[Cats Eye]

Loved the flow of the poem, as for the guy he could drop dead for all i care.

[iamcarolfierce]

Reminded of how SOME guys jerk with girls. SO MEAN! I had been through this, an innocent little girl and easy to fall. Believed that every guys mean what they say. LOL. I love this work. Childhood mem'ries are flashing. Highschool lovelifes and loveLIES. HAHA.

Great job. I could relate through this. :)

[Sarusai Hiryu]

Expresses the idea well.
However, the rhyme gets in the way of the flow sometimes, and even making allowances for poetic license, I'd say the grammar is a bit too shaky.
On the whole, good.

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Good and that guy was a JERK! KICK HIS A*S!

[Jane Lockheart]

wow you guys thank you so much! I'm speechless. No one has ever told me my work is that good. I really appreciate the reviews! :) you guys just made my day

[Zachary_James]

Great

[Christopher.Holmberg]

Honestly, this is great. What a beautiful story/poem. You express yourself so wonderfully...it's just perfect...WHich is completely ironic because what this guy did to you was awful , you deserve better...It probably was love, though we must move on. 100/100!!!

[xx_strawberry_xx]

You might be surprised that I'm saying this, but that was one of the most beautiful poems I've ever read (even though I haven't read that much poems, this is definitely my favourite out of all).
Every single part of it was amazing. From the rhyming to the story--everything was great.
Nice Job~ :D
I'm definitely going to read more of your work ^^