Ouch, it hurts..

You've now got those dead red eyes.
All around you people are watching like flies.
They want you to fall, they want you to fail.
They are carnivores, sniffing out your trail.
Why wouldn't they, you look like a joke?
Your self-rightous beliefs, your dumb bloke.
We couldn't care less whether or not you suceed.
Trust me, another guy is going to come along and plead.

So what makes you special,
is this intentional?
Do you have control over your soul?
What the f**k is wrong with you, what is your goal?
you are scaring me, son.
what is this game? when has it begun?
You are creepy, you know.
A brick i want to throw
at you
I'm screwed.

Drop that knife.
Don't take my life.
I didn't mean what i said.
You make me afraid.
What are you doing?
That is not supposed to go there.
The blood is everywhere.

Ouch, that hurts...... it hurts...................... hurts....

Reviews

[Avoiry]

A eye for an eye. I enjoyed the dialogue feel and the flow of it and how you decided to break it. Pleasing to read, write on.

[Mia Rockwell]

Creepy and deep. I like the pattern of this one