Carnal Servant

Soft touches, sweet warm breath. Eyes closed, arms outstretched. Drudge to my frame, executing your methodical shift. And without even realizing, I'm your carnal servant. My body trembles and shivers, answering your every request. I moan the more i moisten. loving every moment, knowing im serving the best. Submitting to your conviction, maneuvering at your request. Straddlng your anatomy, you control my ripple holdng my breasts. With rhythm we collide, panting, crying out, devoured with bliss. overflowing, releasing our sensual indigestions, as one reaching our prized erotic zenith.

Reviews

[James]

I love the rythm and the build-up in this poem as well as the climax. Very well done and true to life.

[Tiffy Yvonne]

thank you james :)

[Manpreet]

Very sensuous and beautifully written poem!

[B-poet]

Detailed and catchy. Displaying what's happening mentally and emotionally as the moment is happening. I like your style.

[Tiffy Yvonne]

Thank you:)

[kayla]

I love this. All I can say is that I think it would be easier to read in stanza form instead of paragraphs. A few spelling errors, but really good(:

[Tiffy Yvonne]

cool, i think so too

[Crazy Cat Man]

me gusta mucho

[Brandon Mathis]

WOW!!! That is all i can say i like it.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very nice erotic poem. Touch desire and passion with polite and direct statements. That takes great skill. I like the flow of thoughts and the very good ending. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Tiffy Yvonne]

thank you so much, gives me confidence to keep writing

[MoriartyMesa]

This felt like something that you might hear in a voice over, not sure if for a film but would make a nice Spoken Word piece. It could have a really nice stage presence.


Nice job,

[Tiffy Yvonne]

thankx much :)

[Sir Joe]

I so love the way you vividly described the events which are in slow motion on my mind (smile). They're so vivid and clear.This could also do well as a prose. Just add a few more events to the plot and the readers would surely enjoy it.
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[Tiffy Yvonne]

thank you :) thats what i was going for (slow motion) and thanks for the suggestion, I'm gong to take the night and come up with some more "events" lol

[Sir Joe]

(= You're welcome (=