Bella Donna Requiem

Inspired simply by the picture and nothing more...Thank you Deni

This peace you offer

Pinioned prayers and platitudes

Scry in the mercury shattered

Your brittle whispers snap in the rarified air

This madness is thunder at the back of my throat 

Ragged and storm weary 

I tread water in your wake

Spin my tahrihim and trim the fringe 

I am the terminus of fragile breath

Falling away from you 

*Benedicimus Deum meum adventum et egrediente

There is solace in the blind blue moments 

Let me surrender 

To the baptism of despair

The upwelling catechism of *deliquescence

Souls fall clutching the flesh

Gasping for one more shredding dream 

Fill the spinnaker and set sail

I am no longer a seaworthy vessel 

This tethered hope you offer 

Stinging nettles in my mouth

On flitting wings 

Is the drone of hornets in my hair 

 

I crave 

Oblivion

And you are bound to your promise 

It is my free will

To let go...

06/12/12

*God bless my coming and my going out 

*melt away/decay

Author's Note

This poem is not about me, or how I "feel" If you know me , you know I am not one to desire letting go. I was simply inspired by Bubo's post "Field of Crimson Daffodils" - Read the original here... http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Bubo/713610/

Reviews

[R J Askew]

I like the notion of letting go. The notion of oblivion has great appeal ... NO pointless emails, NO competition, NO rain, NO feelings of any kind. It is actually absolutely impossible to imagine. We just can't do it as it involves the absence of imagination, too.

My favourite line is 'The terminus of fragile breath.' There is a purity in all this.

[JRB]

change is the end results of life nicely put and very well written

[Larry Dyson]

most excellent analogy of "free will"...beautiful sentence.."The upwelling catechism of *deliquescence"..as always a paragraph shown in one declaritive sentence..Laury

[EileenMarie]

I love the background, the picture you choose, and the Poem is brilliant!
Letting Go is something I think many should work on to attain peace. I love this! Great job...

[Gandré]

many alliterations. Bravo.
I liked it is the perfect GOTHIC poem. wow. Perhaps you like to write lyrics for such songs? thank you for this!

[Tomás Ó C..]

:-) Another fine verse...

[Debbie_Philly]

STUNNING !!! Very talented writer.... I thought this was beautifully written.... Bravo !!

[R J Askew]

I've just read this again and this time two other lines were the ones that win me: 'I am no longer a seaworthy vessel' which I read personally and '...the drone of hornets in my hair' because it is just so startling.

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Wow, even latin !! Did you just translate it by mind? I really enjoyed the choice of using a latin sentence, great job :)

[Forest Green]

Well penned search for the slip knots that allow for a full release...I liked the line of 'I am not longer seaworthy'...this is a powerful use of literary metaphor. Says so much about life and the wear and tear it can put one through.

Excellent..!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh my God you have a poem with Requiem in the title too... I really like this, looks like you ventured outside your comfort zone and created a intensely rich piece of poetry.