The Veil

inspired by Mark's "A Journey"

Before you tore the veil

And the scales fell from my eyes

Was I a child of the lesser light

Burned out echoes in ashen skies

The thundered rush of blood

Was I deafened by the lies

 

Before you cast the crown

Set diamonds sparkling at my brow

Did I crave the baser things

Found in the here and the now

Wrapped up in my thicker skin

Screaming where and why and how?

 

If you give perfect pleasure

Why would I require pain

What purpose does the deluge serve

For seed drowned out by rain

Why would I surrender Heaven

Just to go through Hell again

 

I can’t unwork the simple truth

Of a destiny unearned

If I step into the fire

I know I will be burned

Sometimes the seminal lesson

Is the lesson left unlearned 

TL Boehm

01/03/2014

Author's Note

there are several schools of though about our existence. Did we exist before we were born here? Do our souls continue on? Do we lather rinse and repeat til the water runs clear? I found Mark's poem fascinating and was inspired to write something. What ever the truth is - I personally struggle with the thought that I "chose" my situation so I could learn something from it. And if I did - Darwin gave us hominids too much cred. Here is Mark's Poem http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Insomnius/1261233/

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem my Poet friend. Many lessons to be learn in your words.
"If you give perfect pleasure
Why would I require pain "
I believe no-one learn the easy way. We must fall down a few times to learn to appreciate the good things. A strong ending to a outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[TL Boehm]

True words, Friend. thank you.

[Einstein Noodle]

love your notes! for me the poem teeters on the edge of "where angels fear to tread" .. choosing truth .. choosing truth must by definition cast us before itself .. and who can stand? ..oh my goodness who can stand?? ... i love your poem .. the thought and journey .. people who are introverted find great rest in such things .. so much of the time i find that one really has to shut up and stand ... and blood drains from the face ... love and peace and so very glad you are back at the cafe :)
E.

[TL Boehm]

Oh that shut up and stand part is so much easier said than done - if the world doesn't distract the stuff in my head does - perhaps that is a trait of writers and introverts? Thank you for your kind review

[Einstein Noodle]

i am reminded of the bible ..which it says (somewhere in there;) that it is a fearful thing to fall into the hands of the Lord ... i agree ..it is not an easy thing to quiet ones self and be still ...seems we do focus so very much on all the things we like ...forgiveness, love, compassion etc... but oh to be asked to quiet myself :)) another story
E.

[Boranus]

If you give perfect pleasure Why would I require pain What purpose does the deluge serve For seed drowned out by rain Why would I surrender Heaven Just to go through Hell again.

Well written, well delivered and flawlessly communicated. I too have wrestled with the origin and
purpose of my existence. The answers elude me though I give good chase. Perhaps by stillness
the truth will reveal itself to me, under surrender and resignation.

[TL Boehm]

Stillness. I believe the world is the enemy of stillness. I heard someone say "resist the tyranny of the urgent." but that is so difficult to do. Thank you for your insightful review.

[SmittyJas]

Don't want to get burned rather have lessons unlearned. Very well written poem Peace poet.

[TL Boehm]

Thank you so much

[Blue]

TL, are you sending RRs? How come I've missed this? This is pure beauty. Your writing style is unpretentious, unadulterated... And you've written this poem with grace. *Applause*

[TL Boehm]

I sometimes send RR's but its not my usual habit to do so. I can send them your way if you want. I never know anymore who receives them.

[Blue]

Well, I'd be very pleased to read your works.

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

This is one of my favorite from your work.

[TL Boehm]

thank you very much.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Ohh,ahh hehe I adored this piece!!! really fabulous write TL :) love the words you used here hehe. My fav part:Why would I surrender Heaven

Just to go through Hell again :)

[TL Boehm]

Thank you Carl. Although I think some days we do just that....

[joshua deathdealer]

This is brilliant and an instant favorite of mine. I like how the depths are gone through..then with the revealing and let go ending. Truly excellent penning!!

[Giggling Star]

I also feel my reason for this life is to learn. You conveyed this so well in your poem. The wonderment of it all. Very well written.