WHY ME

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                     WHY ME?

 

 Why did you choose me out of a million girls?

 

Do you really love me?

 

Am i really your number one?

 

Where ever we go and if we see a girl you flirt with them that makes me debate if you really love me!

 

Thats not love when you figure out what it is tell me?

 

Love is gentle your rough love is calm your not i gave it up to you and know thats all you want thats not really love at all!

 

 

Reviews

[Collect-Eye]

this is really a blog, not a poem
a poem is a re-wording of reality w/ metaphors and/or imagery, not just a summarization in plain English
if it's prose it should have twists and turns
if it's lyrical it should have an angelic quality
etc etc etc...
not asking you to be as abstract as me or anyone else, but give me something that makes me think
and someone can judge me for posting this, but I was sent a friend request w/out being given the courtesy of a review
sometimes criticism is necessary to help someone grow
good poetry doesn't happen over night and it takes a good balance of desire ingenuity and effort
if you wanna help solve your man problems, start w/ yourself
start by empowering yourself and building your self image
ask him if he's really flirting or just being friendly, you'll understand his answer by his emotional state when you ask.
if he turns out to be a d****e, dump him and focus on yourself til someone better comes along.
I could be like most people and placate you and pat your back ,but what's the point.
There's a time to be superficial and a time to speak about reality

[Misty Blue Eyes]

nice poem. you tell him girlie

[Marie Harrison]

Great ranting poem. You tell him. At least you are clear that his type of love isn't the right version for you! Now you're on your way to better men and a higher form of love!

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I feel the emotions. HUGS! It helps to write about it! I know...

Ash

[H-Jonesy]

I have to agree with a few others, this seems like it could be a story; also some punctuation might help your workds make more of a point. and make it easier to read.

Also, it seems you have alot of typos in here, and it does make it hard to read. You might want to look through it and check it over; only so that the reader is focused more on your words than the typos.

All in all, this was a good poem Your meaning is straight forward; and a good one at that. Your heart is definitly in the right place with this.

Nice job, I'll definitly be readin more of your work in the future-

Harmony

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True write! Very lovely as well because it came from your heart and soul.

[Anna]

It is very simple it seems more of a questioning and a dialogue not poetry. Still good job we all have to start somewhere.