WHY ME

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                     WHY ME?

 

 Why did you choose me out of a million girls?

 

Do you really love me?

 

Am i really your number one?

 

Where ever we go and if we see a girl you flirt with them that makes me debate if you really love me!

 

Thats not love when you figure out what it is tell me?

 

Love is gentle your rough love is calm your not i gave it up to you and know thats all you want thats not really love at all!

 

 

Reviews

[Collect-Eye]

this is really a blog, not a poem
a poem is a re-wording of reality w/ metaphors and/or imagery, not just a summarization in plain English
if it's prose it should have twists and turns
if it's lyrical it should have an angelic quality
etc etc etc...
not asking you to be as abstract as me or anyone else, but give me something that makes me think
and someone can judge me for posting this, but I was sent a friend request w/out being given the courtesy of a review
sometimes criticism is necessary to help someone grow
good poetry doesn't happen over night and it takes a good balance of desire ingenuity and effort
if you wanna help solve your man problems, start w/ yourself
start by empowering yourself and building your self image
ask him if he's really flirting or just being friendly, you'll understand his answer by his emotional state when you ask.
if he turns out to be a d****e, dump him and focus on yourself til someone better comes along.
I could be like most people and placate you and pat your back ,but what's the point.
There's a time to be superficial and a time to speak about reality

[Kate Hunter]

good job. Very cute, good word choice.

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

I like, but it could have been a bit better. Bravo still and keep writing!

[Graceful]

wow. so well done. bravo!

[Riathon]

Nice! To the point! More people now adays need to re-evaluate what love really is!

[tizzy k]

thanks

[KAREN]

Amen! Sounds like this person needs to learn the true meaning of love! Good job!!!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

GREAT EFFORT ON WRITING A POEM! I THOUGHT YOU PUT A LOT OF TRUE MEANING IN IT!

[Timothy Lawmowe]

i liked the realism. simple and straight to the point. barely a poem.... in a good way. all i can say would suggest is more analogy. if you want to be quite likely offended, check out my work. :-)

[TraverseTheSea]

Good stuff, you definitely relate to many on the questioning end and have many of us looking for the right answer on the answering end