Unseen

A lover, she had, though no one could see

One who lifted her spirits

When she needed to flee

A figment of mind's eye;

That she so believed

It would make her cry

'Henry' she named him

'Mary' he named her

And 'love' they called it

One that no one could stir

He was there, he was real,

She was convinced

And followed his word

But not once she winced

When he was around

The world seemed to fade

They said she'd gone crazy!

Due to actions displayed

So adamant she was

So completely involved

That this was her life

Not some riddle unsolved

He was the one

So she followed him out

Into the sun

Their feet lined up

At the edge of the cliff

Her eyes drifted down

And her body went stiff

'Forever' he spoke

Their fingers entwined

They leaped off together

Her thoughts left behind

And as I watched from afar

I let out a groan

For everyone knew

That girl jumped alone

Author's Note

A first attempt at a poem, hoping for some good feedback.

Reviews

[Bee C.]

An interesting read. You made it clear from the opening line that something wasn't right, and kept me intrigued and guessing right up until the end. It's really thought-provoking, and has a kind of sincerety to it that made me really feel for the poor girl, and wonder why she felt so unloved that she decided, subconsciously or not, that her only choice was to create her own. My emotions were definitely affected, it's fair to say. But this is very well written for a first attempt. Engaging a reader's attention is one of the most, if not THE most important part of a poem, and you certainly did that. Keep it up dear, I wish you luck with continuing your writing!