Gettin’ Over

..it's over..

Gettin’ Over

I’m down,

to the world I used to live.

I’m drowned,

                  With every stare breakin’ me apart,

I’m kicked,

                           of hopeless hopes I’ve prayed each night,

I’ve missed,

                  the chance to feel the so-called joy,

I go crazy,

                           Just to make my dream out of dreams.

I’m slaved,

                   by soulless rules of human reason,

yet I live,

                  wakin’ out’f awakening,

                        reachin’ beyond existence.

 

 

-musicfunk-

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Nice meaning and structure in this.

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts and I like the purpose of the poem. We must go on. Even in bad time. Must stay on the right road.
"Just to make my dream out of dreams.
I’m slaved,
by soulless rules of human reason,
yet I live,"
Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[~Lizzy♬]

I sometimes feel like this, but then I remember God's there for me. I do love your style of writing in this poem. You made it seem as though the words were actually falling. Wonderful poetry, like always! :)

~Lizzy~

[Marie]

We have to go on--no matter what.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Playful and easy to read, well done.

[Seanne Tholltree]

well that's the way it is...





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_it's a dog eat dog world

[Amata Luna]

Nice. What a great poem! Your style of writing and the choice of words blended everything together into one good flow. :) The poem may have sound tragic a bit to me but realizations at the last parts always bring things all well and good. Thanks for sharing this one. :)

[shunik]

this is an outlived sorrow beyond smile
enjoy reading... =}

[shunik]

thanks =]

[Alexus Shanae]

hmm. This was sad, but the strength in the last lines brought it all together. I like it, thanks for sharing.