A darkened Soul

hate this song

A DARKENED SOUL
"we passed upon the stairs, we spoke in was and when,

 I spoke into his eyes I thought you died alone, a long, long time ago...."

As the sound started to heat up and each lyric slipped into my nerve, a memory of an old friend figured slowly through my mind. His weak determination and crooked outlook of the world taught me the courage of acceptance. From every bit of conversations that we had, I'd already witnessed his tragic history. To nature, he's a dry leaf who never knew the reason of falling; if the wind blow him away or the tree that let him go or the leaf itself that never hold tight. I usually encountered rotten words between life and himself, leaving me to end up like crying. The fact that a friend view the world exactly opposite the way I do is a serious ironic conflict, yet urged me to let him change his ways; to twist his rebelled thoughts to hope or just simply unhook his passivity to perseverance. He often quoted himself as the weak monstrous demon who exist for other's destruction. 
Sickening. 
Life is indeed vulgar. Every detail found and created by human, consciously or unconsciously, dominates the reason of mind, thus, generally constructs malice, the very first emotion felt by Eve; malice that constitutes all other sins, accords pretentious acts and make belief. I am not God speaking words of wisdom on what's right or wrong, coz I guess all of us are already aware of that and we just need to admit that sometimes not all we believe to be true is good or what we perceive as wrong is actually evil. It's the ethics of life, isn't it? 
Through his eyes, I saw a deep longness, a dark image of lost self. I know the pain, coz I felt it from his. 
His tragedies struck me breathless, but what can I do? He knew himself better than I did. 
"I laughed and shook his hand, and made my way back home 
I gazed, a gaze less stare, we walked a million hills, 

I must have died alone, a long, long time ago...."

Now this song slowly comes to an end, that shadowy image of his soul cast my eyes to widely open. Yeah, and there you are lying on your own world, your true peace, your sepulcher deep within my heart. 


-musicfunk-

Author's Note

"inspired by Nirvana's song 'the man who sold the world'
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Reviews

[Max_E_Stone]

I don't really know the song, but you're writing was great. Very expressive. I loved it

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks =]

[Maya Storm]

These are the lines that stuck with me:

"...we spoke in was and when..."
"He often quoted himself ..."

I really liked this piece, it's super poetic. I just saw now that this was inspired by Nirvana's song 'the man who sold the world', interesting because I see that loud and clear. Now I am going all over youtube to remember the 90s. This was very delicious.

[CHRIS ANDES]

oh, thanks
;p

[Brittany]

I'm not familiar with this song...so it would have helped if you had set the song lyrics apart somehow so I knew it wasn't the narrator's voice speaking. I think you have some good thoughts here that could have flowed better with some grammar changes and corrections to typos. Continue to express yourself.

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks
;p

[astronaut]

I ;love your images and it is very unique in so many ways :)

[Tomislav Petricevic]

This is interesting and deep; good job.

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks Tom
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[Pax]

dark word of wisdom, there is a creepy feeling in this work that makes it intriguing to read. i really thought it was inspired by the song by EVANESCENCE but then again its the just the title..good work

[CHRIS ANDES]

yes a little bit of evanescence but a lot of nirvana
thanks you also know about them
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[Pax]

i love evanescence and i like some songs of nirvana as well.. and your welcome

[CHRIS ANDES]

;p

[Barbara Walker]

Oh, i love the last line of this piece!

[CHRIS ANDES]

;p

[Coyote Poetry]

A very entertaining opening chapter. I like the memories and places you took me in the chapter.
"I laughed and shook his hand, and made my way back home
I gazed, a gaze less stare, we walked a million hills,
I must have died alone, a long, long time ago...."
I like the mystery and feel of darkness in the chapter. Thank you for the excellent chapter.
Coyote

[CHRIS ANDES]

yes,..that's why I was inspired by that song
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t.y.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is intriguing...Dark and eerie...the mystery is weaved brilliantly into your story. I like the vivid imagery you have depicted. Well done... looking forward to this.

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks Rob

[Robbie~xoxo~]

You're welcome Sweetie...it's very good...keep it up! :)

[CHRIS ANDES]

;p

[Robbie~xoxo~]

:) :D

[Rhea752]

i like this piece the mystery is good and the word choice is great. keep it up i love it!!!!!!!! :)

[CHRIS ANDES]

a lot of thanks rhea
..I'm also editing it
you want to suggest any improvements?
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[Rhea752]

mostly it was just character development. really good job though!!

[CHRIS ANDES]

oh right
t.y
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