FINGERTIPS

my haiku's =]

FINGERTIPS 

The warmth I felt through 

Sudden touch your arms let go 

Singin' me as so.

Mutual ties collide 

When your hold with mine subside 

it's within unhide. 

You call me crazy

'coz this feeling's unwary

faded and empty. 

Lonesome embraces 

Li'l fingers lined with spaces 

that's spread in hopeless. 

Like glimpse from afar swiftly grip my arms to fly 

you're a shooting star. 

As your hands fit mine

Loneliness can never find 

just as our faith bind. 

Every touch so speak 

our eyes met though never break 

let me not awake.

-musicfunk-

Reviews

[Hope's Etro]

...I right a lot of sad/ melancholy poems and the like, but this one is amazing! You were able to catch the essence of love and emptiness, colliding to make what some would call..... forgiveness' no? anyway great job; would love to read more of your work

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks a lot =]

[Hope's Etro]

Aways welcome my sweet ^.-

[CHRIS ANDES]

:)

[~Lizzy♬]

Awww! Such a beautiful and soothing poem. I couldn't take my eyes off of it as I read. Well done! :)

~Lizzy~

[sk08]

Ohhhh, I like.. ^.^

[Amata Luna]

If you're bubbling with words, you sure bubble good. ;D Love the way you pick your words and placed them as is. I so appreciate the way you made this one. Simply imbued with emotions and simply the style I like so much. Thanks for sharing this one.

[Empirik]

I really love the flow and change of pace. It's like you start with love, then go back to personal emotional descriptions, and back to togetherness. Interesting. I enjoyed it.

[CHRIS ANDES]

..bubbling up with words
=]