HEARTACHES

..to the inspired..

HEARTACHES

Dreams keep on haunting

Bald lyrics beyond the past

Still I, drowned in tears.

Thou arts foolishness

Untold sorry's leaped through me

Another lie’s told.

Little promises

Speak in severe mimicry

Uttered in silence.

Tickled light did spark

Within me I thought can bright

Vanished to the wind.

All that’s lie to give

Tormented and torn apart

Nothing’s left behind.

Solely true, I was

I exist to coexist

Yet inanimate.

Brought to ignorance

Locked upon a darkened room

Jested crowd of sin.

Inhumane gave learned

Tell the world I have my own

Earned to stand as whole.

Author's Note

just a little captivating thoughts!!!
=]

Reviews

[Amata Luna]

Now you gave me another reason to remember a friend and cry... You did great by having this poem speak another kind of heartache. A place where foolishness, regrets and lies exist to make your heart break apart. I loved the wordings and how they fit with one another. You're really good when it comes to that. Keep up the great job. :)

[Yuan]

I love the last stanza, how it sealed the whole concept of this poem. Well done.

[stormwarden]

Very interesting poem. Well done.

[kc]

sucking heartaches of yours makes me bleep

[Seanne Tholltree]

really intensifying thoughts, funk....

[Reaper]

Interesting

[kjsa]

I like it great work, quite captivating too.

[Joshua]

"Solely true, I was
I exist to coexist
Yet inanimate."
My favorite line from this poem.

I find your words very captivating indeed; there's just something about them that I can't quite put words to. Amazing job.

[EMF]

And captivated I was. Exceptionally well written and it held me from start to finish. You took raw emotion and strapped it down to paper. Great job

[Alex Vidmar]

Awesome! Well written Funk!