HEARTACHES

..to the inspired..

HEARTACHES

Dreams keep on haunting

Bald lyrics beyond the past

Still I, drowned in tears.

Thou arts foolishness

Untold sorry's leaped through me

Another lie’s told.

Little promises

Speak in severe mimicry

Uttered in silence.

Tickled light did spark

Within me I thought can bright

Vanished to the wind.

All that’s lie to give

Tormented and torn apart

Nothing’s left behind.

Solely true, I was

I exist to coexist

Yet inanimate.

Brought to ignorance

Locked upon a darkened room

Jested crowd of sin.

Inhumane gave learned

Tell the world I have my own

Earned to stand as whole.

Author's Note

just a little captivating thoughts!!!
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Reviews

[Amata Luna]

Now you gave me another reason to remember a friend and cry... You did great by having this poem speak another kind of heartache. A place where foolishness, regrets and lies exist to make your heart break apart. I loved the wordings and how they fit with one another. You're really good when it comes to that. Keep up the great job. :)

[Grace Catherine C.]

I especially like the third one from the bottom, very good.

[GunMetal]

In the last haiku, I think "learened" should be "learned"?
Heartfelt words. "Tickled light did spark" -Nice. Well done.

[Amila Jay]

A very nice write:))

[shunik]

I forgot to tell this was my compilation of haiku's ..
...inspired by friend
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[Parashar]

nice style ............

[Ness of Love]

This was really good! I like your style of writing

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the way you use the language. Making the thoughts powerful and meaningful. I had to read the poem a few times. Open up the door to many questions. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[The old me]

very interesting.

[irishprincess]

you are really good at writing this is brilliant :)

[Kaylor Mason]

It's obvious you love music, because music feels like the blood of this poem. It sounds like something John Lennon would sing--I could hear the melody of "While My Guitar Gently Weeps" as my eyes soaked in these words. Nice :)