"Krizie Love"

..to my little one =]

I once have my li'l pet kitty that I often called Krizie,
with my tender hugs and kisses, for me she was a baby,
no wonder I was addicted over her sweetness that lingered,
her paws caressed my soul encircling her furry tail around.

Yet her young world wasn't a forever,
teardrops have fallen for a long time without her with me,
the warmth of her love suddenly shivered numbly,
her heart was stolen away as my blue skies turned to gray.

she was gone alone, leaving home and me,
now my hopes were dyin', believing she'll come back no more,
my heart was broken as I cursed the day she left,
but still I keep holdin' on her memories that living.

her untimely affection brought new life within her,
her youthful mind could not fully understand,
how this worldly love she knew made her feel so blue,
a moral was reckoned over her twisted ways.

And now I was satisfied with my new Krizie,
now that she became more gentle and sound,
with her two little p***y by her side,
fervour of a new love aroused her to be better.

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

I'm so sorry for your lil cat :(
Cats are so adorable, I'd like to have one !

[Grace Catherine C.]

Sad and sweet. :)

[R.A. Youngblood]

This is very sad, but sweet. It's very sensitive, and you expressed your emotions very well, i see that your kitty would make you happy. Thanks for sharing..Keep it up buddy :D

[hopelessromantic]

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww

[astronaut]

Very cute, a bit sad. Cats are like children. :)

[Akhand Pratap Singh]

so cute poem!! :D

[Rhea752]

awwwww. i am more of a dog person but this poem was heart touching. cuteness. :)

[Knight in Armor]

A few lines are unclear as to what they mean. However, as an emotional piece, it's wonderful!

[Pax]

sweet, i love cats.

[CHRIS ANDES]

haha
=]

[Scytheriax]

There's a few grammatical errors in this piece that could use revision, such as capitalization.
Also, you might want to either reword some of the lines so it's a little less rhyming.

But I liked the emotion in this poem. It reminds me a lot of how I would feel if I lost my cat. Animals are often closer to people than other humans are and I think that this poem accurately describes that and is able to capture the feelings of a pet owner who was close to their animal.

I think overall it was pretty well written, but that it also has room for some improvements, as well.

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks
;p

[Scytheriax]

No problem :)