VANISHED

VANISHED

3.16.16

 

My tangled thoughts as I close my eyes,

I wrapped my burdens and of my foe

By dreaming awake,

Turning the waves of this massive talks

By making a point,

To shut up is to shout in silence

To reason out is to repeat your mind,

To play safe is to theater play

To ignore,

 Such ignorance and

 To self, abandonment.

 

Let not speak when you say,

Let not die as you forgive,

Let thy birds sing

When you’re deaf with your own heartbeat.

Reviews

[G!o]

The imagery in this poem is magical and something that gabs the reader (me, of course) from the very first line. You have mashed fiction and reality together beautifully, beautiful in deed. This is the type of poem that you read and start reflecting on the missed holes in our lives like how honest it is when we are silent we are actually screaming. This is an amazing write but I would suggest to match it well, try listen to some of your favourite songs then alter the title, it will add much weight to it. Make it magical just as the poem itself is.

G!o

[shunik]

thank you for the review and suggestion. well noted.

[biggerthenu]

I really enjoyed the Awakening and Death. Nice write

[shunik]

thank you for the review

[I Am Svetlana]

Isn't it marvelous when you wake up a new person? Having that epiphany and finally taking a different road to your life. Writing helped me figure that out for me and I couldn't be more thankful.

[shunik]

indeed my friend. thanks for the review

[SUGATA M]

Some memorable lines of the poem:

To shut up is to shout in silence

Let not speak when you say,
Let not die as you forgive,
Let thy birds sing
When you’re deaf with your own heartbeat.

[shunik]

thank you for the review.

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest and strong words dear Poet.
"Let not speak when you say,
Let not die as you forgive,
Let thy birds sing
When you’re deaf with your own heartbeat."
The above lines are true. Deaf ears know only more anger. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[shunik]

thank you as well sir for the kind reply :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Jon Roggie]

This is only a continuing echo. Always speak your mind. Pass by the critic's flotsam.

[shunik]

indeed. thanks for the review.