HOW I RECALL

to a friend :)

the moment your fingers

waved to say goodbye

you turned around 

to walk on by, 

back then I melted 

as the rain falls

so strong 

and let you fade,

and my eyes blinked

for a moment

or two,

how I recall

that your stare 

grip my hands

to close the door,

we talked like children 

sittin' on a bench of autumn bright.

Then our smiles so close 

it touched the sky

to be the stars  yet

those Hi's 

still say GOODBYE.

     

-musicfunk-                

            

Author's Note

I made this poem during a super typhoon
I just don't know why :)

Reviews

[realmwriter]

Allthough the piece as a whole has a light and vibrant feel, there is a dark undertone to it brought on I think by the last lines. They serve, at least to me, to remind of a painful time, perhaps when mother waived from the porch as you set of to school on the bus and when you returned home something tragic had happened and mother wasnt there. I can't really put my finger on it but there is an icyness to this piece. I really like this. Great job.

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks my friend :)

[realmwriter]

You're most welcome.

[Renée]

Sounds like something was swirling in the air…you just had to catch and share ( : Lovely visions you painted

[CHRIS ANDES]

:) thank you Renée :)

[Renée]

my pleasure luv ( :

[Coyote Poetry]

I hope you are okay? A super typhoon is dangerous. I like the poem. It is nice to have good conversation and a park bench to create friendship and hope. Good visions create by the amazing poem.
Coyote

[CHRIS ANDES]

thank you sir, but people can't avoid tragedies and though many filipinos were killed, we still got hope :)

[Jason]

Nice poem, I really like it :3

[CHRIS ANDES]

well, thank you :)