In My Head

In my head
there came a knock
a huge black cloud
known as PAIN
cracking and thunderin'
to get in...

gettin' over my heart and soul
suffocating that yellow sunshine
with such dark memory
known as PAST...

until suddenly it melts,
started to drop and drop...
...and drop...
slowly fallen like rain.

I don't know why
but that knockin' stopped ...
..turned into beats of the drum.

Rain is a violin singing ..
..makin' me FLOAT
....STARE
....LISTEN
...and SMILE..



and there was you...
........
..............I mean LIFE.

-musicfunk-  

         

Author's Note

..probably a product of happy memories,
just being glad discovering things
...start appreciating life and you'll see =]

Reviews

[PaperLife]

You have a very delicate way with words that's very in depth and amazing. They're like soft petals from springtime playing across a sketchbook patterned with all of life's up and downs. Your words are deep, passionate. And amazing. This is beautiful and your talent shines through brightly. It takes me around and back to the past and into the future. You have a way with your words that makes sense. That is solid and beautiful. I love it

[shunik]

thanks a lot =]

[Vanessa van Gersie]

i loved how you began the poem with each intricate thought,but towards the end i got lost a bit as to what you were talking about but it's a nice piece overall. :)

[Jock Engelman]

I really enjoyed this however I found that I began slowly and gradually losing interest I feel that this is because of how well you began this poem. But also because how the ending in comparison was not as strong.

[shunik]

thanks for the review :)

[Nicholas Hagenschneider]

F*****g awesome. Well done.

[shunik]

;)

[Japanese Cherry]

I loved this, you did a nice job here ^_^ I enjoyed reading, lifted my mood at the end...

[shunik]

tinkyu kuroneko :)

[Japanese Cherry]

Anata no kangei, ur welcome!

[shunik]

;)

[MattHeston]

An enjoyable read.

[shunik]

;) thanks

[Heromen Selena]

Very happy at the end :) great job.

[shunik]

well, thank you heromen :)

[PurpleQuartz]

Wonderful writing! Really wonderful!

[shunik]

thank you :)

[Akhand Pratap Singh]

Nice poem :) the way you capitalized words was nice use, a very uplifting poem

[shunik]

thanks endless sea :)

[Bluefire]

This is beautiful.
You've done what I haven't seen much in my life.
Write a happy uplifting poem.
Well done! ^^

[shunik]

thank you bluefire :)

[Bluefire]

No problem! :3