mist

..feel the rain...

why does rain collides with pain?
in every drop
there is solitude,
with every fall
there's the cold.

even a love song
sings with this feelin',
within this drizzle
just like 'walking in the rain'
or listen to the 'thunder'.

victims of unhoped for future,
unspoken truth and betrayal
drowned with tears
of foolishness, of innocence..
all flow with the rain.

thunderin' sound
of heartbeats broken,
lightning from dark
dreams of uncertainty
sparks never- ending

sudden stops of rain fallin'
swiftly dissolved from heaven
left I, with silver mist
rolled down...
from my own cheeks.

-musicfunk-

Author's Note

a heavy rain last night rose up my alpha state after a hard day dealing with this cruel thing called reality.
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Reviews

[RachelReaper]

"just like 'walking in the rain" wordplay!!!! awesome! my only critique is that in the first paragraph, shouldn't it be "Why does rain collide with pain?" and not, "why do rain collides with pain?". that was the only mistake i caught and other than that nice work, i personally love the rain.

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks rachel 'walking in the rain is a song actually
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[TheLastEclipse]

It would be very beautifuyl if the grammar was correct. Improve this and poetry shall be your friend. I do see some potential.

[CHRIS ANDES]

i've edited it
thanks =]

[Krista Weiss]

Wow!! Really great poem I love it!! :)

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks krista
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[Calibaster]

That was Awesome! make it into a song!

[CHRIS ANDES]

if i would be a good singer i will
thanks
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[Coyote Poetry]

It seem like rain does fall when we are sad. I like the emotion and the artwork. Rain can be a kind of peace also. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks sir
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