mist

..feel the rain...

why does rain collides with pain?
in every drop
there is solitude,
with every fall
there's the cold.

even a love song
sings with this feelin',
within this drizzle
just like 'walking in the rain'
or listen to the 'thunder'.

victims of unhoped for future,
unspoken truth and betrayal
drowned with tears
of foolishness, of innocence..
all flow with the rain.

thunderin' sound
of heartbeats broken,
lightning from dark
dreams of uncertainty
sparks never- ending

sudden stops of rain fallin'
swiftly dissolved from heaven
left I, with silver mist
rolled down...
from my own cheeks.

-musicfunk-

Author's Note

a heavy rain last night rose up my alpha state after a hard day dealing with this cruel thing called reality.
=]

Reviews

[RachelReaper]

"just like 'walking in the rain" wordplay!!!! awesome! my only critique is that in the first paragraph, shouldn't it be "Why does rain collide with pain?" and not, "why do rain collides with pain?". that was the only mistake i caught and other than that nice work, i personally love the rain.

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks rachel 'walking in the rain is a song actually
=]

[SlightlyOdd]

Interesting comparison sorta reminded me of how they always seem to like to show funerals in rainy weather.

[Robert Robbie Lord Dudl..]

i like to listen to The Doors, riders on the storm, the rain falling reminds me always of a hot Summer's night and the pillow feels soft and cool to sleep
awhile the song's playing with the lights out, nice piece of work your poem is
effortless, leaves me a real feel of ease, peace of mind is a real precious thing;
nice photo, looks very.. CHA-CHA-CHA-CHA-CHERRY BOMB
from the greatest girl band ever The Runaways

[Kaylor Mason]

Rain is only as bad as you want it to be . . . sometimes for me, rain is the greatest blessing there is . . . just standing in it with no coat and hat is vital to make it through the day. (Don't stand there for too long, though--or you'll get sick)

[CHRIS ANDES]

nice point
yeah,haha
=]

[mhaie]

nice.

[Samantha (:]

wow, I love this poem. The only thing I saw that's wrong is a typo in the first line. Should be "collide" not "collides". :)

[teardrop]

now i love this, love the feelings that flow through,
good strong emotion, love it

[CHRIS ANDES]

my pleasure
=]

[Jon Roggie]

Nice. Love the imagery. Curious though, the Ronettes?

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks, hm,what do you mean?

[Relic]

You did this very well, the images and comparisons are striking. The last verse really compliments the ending, like a cycle of nature and the human condition. Nice writing.

[CHRIS ANDES]

thank you =]

[Relic]

:)

[TheJordBaker]

a very good write, solemn yet beautiful. I love this stanza:
victims of unhoped for future,
unspoken truth and betrayal
drowned with tears
of foolishness, of innocence..
all flow with the rain.

[CHRIS ANDES]

=] thanks!

[Tex]

this might be the first piece of yours I have visited. Wow what an opener. and this stanza:

victims of unhoped for future,
unspoken truth and betrayal
drowned with tears
of foolishness, of innocence..
all flow with the rain.

could be a poem all it's own. The depth of that stanza is remarkable it must be meditated on to see its reach. this is a write that can be read months later and and then again years later and each time different meaning will come to the fore because your are in a different spot in your life... Very well written my friend.

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks for the patience reading it
=]

[Tex]

pleasure was mine.