TELL ME

tell me if it's not enough
tell me when tears run by,
I will always stay close to you
                                .......just tell me,

tell me when you're in pain
when world of smile
                                 .....you can't regain


reality is true
still waiting for you
if smiles revealed without me
               ......just tell me
UNSPOKEN.

-musicfunk-

Reviews

[misha]

Great job! This was very good :-)

[The Broken Beauty]

I really enjoyed that poem. :)

[shunik]

thank you if it made you :)

[Robert Robbie Lord Dudl..]

I felt my heart get clearer and my head got fuzzier
well wrote just saying just me I perhaps might
have ended the last word to finish as Unspokenly !

[shunik]

well, that's a good idea
thanks for the share ;)

[FocusedAmnesia]

Short and powerful.

[Barbara Walker]

With few words, i hear your intent, barely spoken. A poem doesn't have to be long to say a lot, as you have proven with this one.

[fireblossom]

I would love to spend time with the author of this poem. They say most of what is said between humans is done without words. Though few in words this poem says all. Very well done.

[shunik]

thanks fb =]

[Trevor Fielding]

A lot of emotion packed into this. It has a lyrical flow to it that really drew me in, and then that last word hit hard. Very well done.

[shunik]

thanks =]
its good to know that you can relate to it

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

the expectancy of an answer...
maybe it will come maybe never...
maybe it is already there and you have passed it by:)
very nice

[Fréyjä Helv..]

Beautiful! And the emotions flowed naturally on this one... Silence could hold a thousand thoughts...I loved this...

[shunik]

thank you vit =]