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Take it in to let it go

Cycles of life

Watch them go

Round and round~

 

Free then bound

Lost then found

Cycles of eternal death

Rising to living again

Sleeping to wake again

Breathe in, breathe out,

Life turns as the worlds does

Spinning out of control

Wanting to get off

Take of shoes and socks

And just be…

Still.

Love blossom then dies

And smiles turn into sighs

While laughter turns into cries

Hello’s morph into goodbyes

And truths become lies~

And I love you dies…

While steps become sluggish

When beginning as runs

And breath agitates lungs

Holding on turns into moving on

And awake becomes sleep

 As punctured hearts leak

Defeat becomes retreat

and lips no longer speak

of such things like dreams...

I wake to sleep~

 

Take it in to let it go

Cycles of life

Watch Them go

Round and round ~

 

 

Reviews

[Last Lying Look]

I like this. I found the beginning a little weak but there were a lot of really good parts.
My favorite parts were:
"Take of shoes and socks
And just be�
Still."
anddd...
"Hello's morph into goodbyes
And truths become lies~
And I love you dies�"
anddddddddd....
"And breath agitates lungs
Holding on turns into moving on
And awake becomes sleep
As punctured hearts leak
Defeat becomes retreat
and lips no longer speak
of such things like dreams...
I wake to sleep~"

Overall it was pretty damn good. I really enjoyed reading it. Thanks for adding it.
You should totally think of a kick a*s title for it.

-Elissa

[Michael X]

Powerful and insightful, expresses life lessons so clearly.

[STurner]

Wonderfully deep and real to the core. Oh yes, the entire poem says "Be there and feel!" Relationships are rarely permanent but even those that last can suddenly change -- "And awake becomes sleep/ As punctured hears leak/ Defeat becomes retreat / and lips no longer speak / of such things like dreams.../ I wake to sleep" How poetic and chillingly true. Like unto a dream (ship) cast against the cold and unrelenting shores of life, to be scarred and broken... I verr nearly shouted "Amen!!" to this one. Well done, well done indeed.

[Frank Terino]

Beautifully written, this insightful poem has heart touching feature, nice depth, dimension and feature,
I really enjoyed reading it, keep up the great work.

[R J Askew]

'I wake to sleep' is a thought provoking line, and true of so many of us as we settle into routines.
I think the following is the best passage of the poem...

Love blossom then dies
And smiles turn into sighs
While laughter turns into cries
Hello's morph into goodbyes
And truths become lies~
And I love you dies�

Maybe the poem is uber realistic, as many people suffer disappointment along the way for all kinds of reasons. Maybe life chews us all up one way or another. We all get tired at times. But then we begin again...

[JRB]

nice write,
Jan/uisiom

[Barbara Walker]

This is a great description about the ins and outs, the flowing to and the flowing on, the yin and yang, all the cycles we can go through. I really like this! Take off shoes and socks and just be...still. My favorite line, I think. They are all good!Barbara

[Mr. Deft Diction]

I dig the back and forth of this piece. There's a beginning and an end. For everything comes around again....full circle, right?

Nice write.